A song I'm writing right now, but it's not done. Tell me what you think of it so far!

 

The Black Forest

 

(Verse 1)

 

Hidden from the world

But set in my sights

Where the birds are white

And it feels so right

 

(Verse 2)

 

To be free again

To be alone

In the darkest place

That I've ever known

 

(Chorus)

 

Where that trees are black

And the skies are red

Never looking back

Always looking ahead

Where the lakes are dry

And the shadows float

You will never die

But you will always grow old

 

Thanks for reading!

Nice rhyming. Flows but it's not forced. Very ominous feel to it, reminds me of an old song I wrote a long time ago called "Paranoia"

 

keep it up, let me know when you finish it:thumbsup:

thanks! i made up my own songwriting technique lol. i just thought that taking a shower might bring up some ideas. i dont know why but this song came out of it

thanks! i made up my own songwriting technique lol. i just thought that taking a shower might bring up some ideas. i dont know why but this song came out of it

I have written many a song in the shower as well;)