January 21, 200323 yr what you guys think ... and i want honest, i'll never improve my skills if people don't give me an honest opinion! Verse 1 The recruitment drive promises glory and riches, They fail to tell of the death and squaller of those desert ditches. Mother Teresa would turn in her grave, To see the demise of the young and the brave. Chorus He's a 21st century Jekyll and Hyde, With a face of a saint and a smile so wide, Under his grin which could hardly get any bigger He enjoys having his finger over the trigger Verse 2 Everyone in their right mind wants world peace Yet the government want to make a soldier out of Mr McNeice Would President Blair send his son to die And risk having to join the bereaved as they cry? Chorus He's a 21st century Jekyll and Hyde, With a face of a saint and a smile so wide, Under his grin which could hardly get any bigger He enjoys having his finger over the trigger Verse 3 His doctors continue to spin their lies As he drops bombs on the innocent from the skies Those lives he promises freedom and change His armies have amassed within their range Chorus He's a 21st century Jekyll and Hyde, With a face of a saint and a smile so wide, Under his grin which could hardly get any bigger He enjoys having his finger over the trigger
January 21, 200323 yr ok heres my opinion. it all rhyms the lyrics are good the song has a meaning and i just think its brilliant so yeah i like it
January 21, 200323 yr Author ok heres my opinion. it all rhyms the lyrics are good the song has a meaning and i just think its brilliant so yeah i like it and that is your honest opinion ... you not just saying it's good so that i won't be offended?
January 21, 200323 yr im definetly being honest here.. when i think something sucks i would definetly say it.
January 21, 200323 yr Author im definetly being honest here.. when i think something sucks i would definetly say it. I've written another song but it's only the bare bones ... it needs alot of work.
January 21, 200323 yr would love to see more work always love to see/read other ppl's work i tried writing a song but im not realy good at it, poetry is more my kinda stuff..
January 22, 200323 yr I'd have to agree with whatshername i would have to hear it if you wanted me to judge it. my opinion: I really dont like how you have the rhyme thing going on. maybe you could change that up a bit, but if i heard it and it sounded good i wouldnt say anything then. :roll: its good though :D you got something going, and that's more than what i could possibly do. :D ;)
January 22, 200323 yr Author I'd have to agree with whatshername i would have to hear it if you wanted me to judge it. my opinion: I really dont like how you have the rhyme thing going on. maybe you could change that up a bit, but if i heard it and it sounded good i wouldnt say anything then. :roll: its good though :D you got something going, and that's more than what i could possibly do. :D ;) yeah i lean far to much on rhyming lines ... i'm going to concentrate less on that ... it would make a good poem i think ... the song is actually the first full song i've ever written!
January 22, 200323 yr always, stays in the background and its so hard to find the nothings that arent important and its so hard to find the place not far away where i just might be but i cant be me aometimes your mind is so full of other peoples worries theres no room for your own but i say it all and ive said too much but i say nothing and i havent said what i mean and i still dont know you and its not that hard to find the somethings that are important and its not that hard to read what you write but it is that hard to see what you mean and i watch how it all grows but nothing comes in return [chorus] and i broke a window and after all, maybe it but then it doesnt whats wrong with being sure? :shrug:
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