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Intelligent Wisdom That You Might Want to Pay Attention to a cat plays with yarn a horse lives in a barn but the cow never knew how she ended up jumping over the moon

tragic truth proof with the normal exaggerations of a lover to threaten and to promise her to give and to ask forgiveness from given more from above then living more than life would permit us living and dying for you I would do and promises are words but search me you could never find an unfortunate truth so as evidence of servitude I submit my bloody corpse

I liked this except the last line didn't seem right to me "in my maze" the "maze" just seems kind of random. I kind of like the way you use "me" the theme of the poem is rather simple "I changed for me, not for you" and I think you do well with your style but there are still a few grammatical things to work on maybe. I know you did some on purpose.. this poem sort of sounds like a conversation, if you could make it sound more like that then it might work better. for example when you said "And what? What are you gonna do?" you could try using a progression and answer the question for them.. I'm just trying to give advice cuz I like when people do that for me, I don't want to make you feel bad about anything. I'd be willing to give more advice but usually if someone doesn't ask then I don't give much but if you'd like it that's good. It's just that you've written a lot and I think you deserve some criticism and help or praise whatever you like.

top 5 things about yesterday 1 mink coats 2 dkny.com 3 bunny & boo pictures 4 talking about bunnies 5 who it all was with

and behold: :disappointed:

ew :bigcry: lizards and girls named bob! :bigcry:

you can do a google image search to find out what the consequences are :blush: refer to these pictures and take note on the unbearable consequences: :nice: consequence # 1 (warning) you will be stunned, shocked, appaled, disguisted, sickened and most of all .. petrified once you have recieved the warning as a poor innocent kitten has encountered the chant of an evil sinister koala step # 2 (shortening of appendages) In these next two steps before and after pictures have been taken to ensure clarity. this step is fairly simple. all appendages, legs, arms, and other unmentionables will be of shorter length. In this case a warning has already occured therefore the koala has all right to punish the sufferer for their total oblivion and ambivalence. before: after: step # 3 (the final step) total manliness / confidence elimination. the most painful of all consequences when regarding the koala chants. After only 30 minutes of listening to said chant the listener loses all masculinity of any sort. before: after:

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never trust a koala, never :evil: or suffer the consequences of the koala chant

*awkward moment*

an ode to m'lady bob falling in love with a woman named bob made me lose my important job because my boss said "that's so bull! it's not a girl, you're a homosexual"

an ode to m'lady bob falling in love with a woman named bob made me lose my important job because my boss said "that's so bull! it's not a girl, you're a homosexual"

speak you nonsense of this late hour in sweden. becky is happy like a tortise that is happy if a tortise were happy thence it woulds't be mine countenance

lady bright, how you be?

I love hillary duff !! :dance:

:rolleyes:

I guess rick is gonna have to find someone else to spank :curtain: *runs and trips over something*

:bigcry: now I have to go :bigcry: :lol: I have to go eat

:lol: I was telling rick not to let you see us........ talking about ..... boy things

I know:bigcry: , I've been saving up all the badness just for this one moment of punishment :evil: don't let her see :evil:

sorry :uhoh: I was looking at more pics cuz I'm a spielverderber :wacky: spielverderber this : : it makes no sense, I see no black eyed angels or black eyed peas or anything

I wish I was there right now their banners look odd, maybe a little depressing but I like radiohead's artisticness in every way

random picture which I'm not going to ask to post :evil: such a rebel am I