The One And Only(Original song)

[Spider-Man]

So here's a song I was inspired to write after listening to The Only Exception by Paramore, Coldplay's early music and 76543's song. Still working on the lyrics.

 

You are the one and only exception

When I see you

You can see my reflection

My heartache has an infection

And the only release from it is you

 

You are the one and only

To keep me from feeling lonely

You are the one and only

The one and only

 

You are the one for me

You are the one to set me free

You are the wind, howling under my skin

And without you, I would be in a spin

 

You are the one and only

To keep me from feeling lonely

You are the one and only

The one and only

 

ooh ooh ooh

ooh ooh ooh

ooh ooh ooh

ooh ooh ooh

 

You are the one and only

To keep me from feeling lonely

You are the one and only

The one and only

 

 

Feedback is appreciated on how to make this better. Thanks :)

[SevenSixFiveFourThree]

WOW that's great!

 

One thing I would say about this is that I think it might need a few more lines like this one: You are the wind, howling under my skin

And without you, I would be in a spin

 

That line the the best part of the song because it has a brilliant theme to it in the way it mentions "under my skin" it shows how the person who the protagonist is talking about is a part of them.

 

I hope that made sense, I really like this song but it could use a few more lines otherwise it's fantastic!

 

p.s I also love the way the two people in this song are well connected with eachother or at least the protagonist thinks so :)

[Spider-Man]

Thanks! I added a few lines since I posted it, Thanks for taking the time to post. Thank you for the advice it helps a lot. :D

[SevenSixFiveFourThree]

No worries, it's a great song, infact it's inspired me to start writing a new song right now!

[Spider-Man]

Haha that's great. Because your song inspired me to write this.

[Spider-Man]

I have 9 songs, but they don't feel deep enough for me. So I started again a few hours ago. Goal is to write 5 good songs. The one above is one. Could you tell me what you think of this one here. I just finished it, it was heavily influenced by The Fray's You Found Me. And may need input.

 

Bridges

 

All my days were turned dark

Lost without finding the spark

All the bridges I've crossed

Were burned down to the ground

Without a way of getting across

Now I'm lost, now I'm lost

 

Where have all the bridges gone?

They used to stretch forever long

Where has all the hope gone

They were standing strong

They were standing strong

Where have all the bridges gone?

They gave me hope when right went wrong

 

The fire rose and burnt all my clothes

Then the rain came and I froze

When will this end?

Can I send you a letter explaining

how I became a fiend

In the pouring rain

It came and cleaned all my thoughts

While I stood and fought

the demons inside of me

 

In the city that never rests

There you were sitting on a bridge weeping

While everybody else was sleeping

You thought about leaping

And all you loved seeped through your heart

The thought of it tore you apart

What can I do

What can I do to help you re start

 

Where have all the bridges gone?

They used to stretch forever long

Where has all the hope gone

They were standing strong

They were standing strong

Where have all the bridges gone?

They gave me hope when right went wrong

 

Post your songs too, we can share opinions. :)