The_Escapist_229 Posted September 21, 2012 Share Posted September 21, 2012 I'm very emotional tonight and this poem really moved me. Sad, but lovely. Here's something I wrote a few nights ago, before falling asleep. I usually write in rhyme, that's not the case with this moment's thought. Time and Eternity You close your eyes and you wait, but the clock doesn't wait for you because it's being waited for by the eternity's wide open arms. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted September 21, 2012 Share Posted September 21, 2012 It's a great poem, Shredder2. Reminds me of Coldplay's Such a Rush. Here's another one of mine Same letters, different names Which side will I wake up on after my wars have all been won? Will I open my eyes to the land I know or will I be a prisoner down there below? Could a piece of heaven have a place for me, a plaque with my name on it that one day I'll see? In each and every way, above's a perfect world, each tear wiped away and every prayer heard. But is it really true that it waits for me and you with its fountains of gold or have those dreams been sold? Just like same letters form a different name, maybe up there everything's the same. Thanks! And this poem, I can relate to at the moment. Okay, here's a little something I wrote today. Hello dear stranger With eyes like the ocean And hair like the sand on it's beaches and shores Hello dear stranger Alone and forgot Wherever you turn people just close their doors Hello dear stranger Come tell me your story Come tell me about all the journeys you've had Hello dear stranger Although I don't know you I see from your eyes you're incredibly sad Hello dear stranger There's no need to worry Although home and fam'ly are so far away Hello dear stranger Come walk through my garden Just take a quick rest before you're on your way I like this one. Sounds like something I'd write myself. I'm very emotional tonight and this poem really moved me. Sad, but lovely. Here's something I wrote a few nights ago, before falling asleep. I usually write in rhyme, that's not the case with this moment's thought. Time and Eternity You close your eyes and you wait, but the clock doesn't wait for you because it's being waited for by the eternity's wide open arms. At this rate, I'd love to share more with you guys. Finally, I have found a place to share my lyrics/poems with. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted September 21, 2012 Share Posted September 21, 2012 Thanks, Shredder2. What might interest you guys is poetry sites. I use AllPoetry and it's a cool place. Check it out if you want. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted September 21, 2012 Share Posted September 21, 2012 I haven't checked it out yet. I might just do so now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted September 21, 2012 Share Posted September 21, 2012 Great! Same goes to everyone else, check it out, you might like it. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted September 21, 2012 Share Posted September 21, 2012 I just posted the poem I shared in this thread on AllPoetry! http://allpoetry.com/poem/9992055-The_Nameless__Washed_Out_World-by-shredder2 :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted September 21, 2012 Share Posted September 21, 2012 I commented on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brent Posted September 21, 2012 Share Posted September 21, 2012 Do you want help on how to improve them? I dabbled in poetry during undergrad, but I don't have enough patience to write it anymore. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Troxley Posted September 22, 2012 Share Posted September 22, 2012 I just put my first poem up on AllPoetry! http://allpoetry.com/poem/9992611-The_Stormy_Concert-by-LaurElizabeth Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted September 22, 2012 Share Posted September 22, 2012 Glad you guys like it. I've been a member since 2008, it's a wonderful community. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted September 22, 2012 Share Posted September 22, 2012 Here's a little something worn out The worn out fear has slowly found its way back to its home right here - the noose around my neck. It wraps itself around my heart and it squeezes tight. My feelings grow further apart, all worn out tonight. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Troxley Posted September 22, 2012 Share Posted September 22, 2012 Nice! :scholar: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted September 22, 2012 Share Posted September 22, 2012 Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Troxley Posted September 22, 2012 Share Posted September 22, 2012 You're welcome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted September 22, 2012 Share Posted September 22, 2012 Today, I've finally wrote down all (well, most) of my thoughts, and compiled it into what I think is my most powerful piece of literature yet. Partial credit (and inspiration) goes to the one who I apologize to, in hopes that someday, you'll forgive and forget. This poem is called "Autumn Falls" simply because I wrote it on the day autumn has started, which is today, September 22. "Autumn Falls" I'm the douchebag of your world, apparently. I'll drink to that. Where is the truth? I say I'm fine, but inside, I'm hurt. I don't even know where I'm going Does it even matter anymore? Someone wake me up from this nightmare. Oh wait, I'm already awake. Too bad none of this is fake. We can share the silence together. It's up to one of us to end it. Let's see who'll end up shooting first. I'd apologize for using your words against you but what you said was the truth. I'm the asshole of your world, apparently. I'll drink to that. I want the truth. I say I'm fine, but inside, I'm hurt. I could break down and trash a room. Goddammit, I can't even do that. Another sleepless night for me. I know I'm tired, but I'm too upset. I dozed off for an hour, but that hour was only a minute. I never done this on my own. Is this the real world for me? I fell off and dropped out of the bicycle race. I'll look back, but I won't go on. All of this is a fucking disgrace. I'm the scumbag of your world, apparently. Let's drink to that. Will I ever know the truth? I say I'm fine, but inside, I'm hurt. I ended hopes for a promising career but with every end, something starts anew. Uncomfortable, upset, and awkward, I have made you. I'm sorry for that, I know I fucked up. Now who will you trust? We're all dedicated to pursuit happiness. Love who you want, I won't stop you. After all, it's your choice. Damn, I need to make better decisions. Crying my tears won't louden my voice. Last, but not least, I'm the jerkoff of your world, apparently. Who'll drink to that? Who'll know the truth? I say I'm fine, but inside, I'm hurt I should get off now. さようなら, jerk. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted September 22, 2012 Share Posted September 22, 2012 All Poetry: http://allpoetry.com/poem/9994435-Autumn_Falls-by-shredder2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Last night, I had a dream, which I really needed to break down and analyze. Near the end of my dream, I was sitting in a classroom, and "Kaganezu" (かがねず) was sung in my head, as if it were a song I've heard somewhere, which I really hadn't. I woke up from the dream, and tried to figure out what it meant. Turns out, it means "I cannot sleep" in Japanese. Funny. I couldn't sleep the night before. Now I knew I needed to break the dream down. This lead me to write about it, which still, I'm not over the inspiration I had when I wrote "Autumn Falls" yesterday. "かがねず" かがねず Come sit by me, and watch the rain fall. We really don't need to talk at all. A man was shot, turns out, he was a comedian. A man was tazed, turns out, he deserved it. I cannot sleep. Come sit by me, and watch the fireside. Apologize, that is, if you feel it's right. I'll say my ABC's, but I'll stop at the letter Q. All I really wanted was for you to give me a cue. Three kids were stopped in the middle of a hallway. Three people sat in front of me. I cannot sleep. Come sit by me, and watch the stars shine. None of us shall bitch, complain, or even whine. かがねず Come sit by me, and watch the rain fall. Come sit by me, and watch the grass grow tall. I cannot sleep. We really don't need to talk at all. Reaching our goals, I go straight through a wall. かがねず Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 http://allpoetry.com/poem/9996181-%E3%81%8B%E3%81%8C%E3%81%AD%E3%81%9A-by-shredder2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alien Radio Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Last night, I had a dream, which I really needed to break down and analyze. Near the end of my dream, I was sitting in a classroom, and "Kaganezu" (かがねず) was sung in my head, as if it were a song I've heard somewhere, which I really hadn't. I woke up from the dream, and tried to figure out what it meant. Turns out, it means "I cannot sleep" in Japanese. Funny. I couldn't sleep the night before. Now I knew I needed to break the dream down. This lead me to write about it, which still, I'm not over the inspiration I had when I wrote "Autumn Falls" yesterday. "かがねず" かがねず Come sit by me, and watch the rain fall. We really don't need to talk at all. A man was shot, turns out, he was a comedian. A man was tazed, turns out, he deserved it. I cannot sleep. Come sit by me, and watch the fireside. Apologize, that is, if you feel it's right. I'll say my ABC's, but I'll stop at the letter Q. All I really wanted was for you to give me a cue. Three kids were stopped in the middle of a hallway. Three people sat in front of me. I cannot sleep. Come sit by me, and watch the stars shine. None of us shall bitch, complain, or even whine. かがねず Come sit by me, and watch the rain fall. Come sit by me, and watch the grass grow tall. I cannot sleep. We really don't need to talk at all. Reaching our goals, I go straight through a wall. かがねず Wow Anthony I love this :surprised: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alien Radio Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Okay, here's a little something I wrote today. Hello dear stranger With eyes like the ocean And hair like the sand on it's beaches and shores Hello dear stranger Alone and forgot Wherever you turn people just close their doors Hello dear stranger Come tell me your story Come tell me about all the journeys you've had Hello dear stranger Although I don't know you I see from your eyes you're incredibly sad Hello dear stranger There's no need to worry Although home and fam'ly are so far away Hello dear stranger Come walk through my garden Just take a quick rest before you're on your way This is lovely :wacky: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alien Radio Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 It's a great poem, Shredder2. Reminds me of Coldplay's Such a Rush. Here's another one of mine Same letters, different names Which side will I wake up on after my wars have all been won? Will I open my eyes to the land I know or will I be a prisoner down there below? Could a piece of heaven have a place for me, a plaque with my name on it that one day I'll see? In each and every way, above's a perfect world, each tear wiped away and every prayer heard. But is it really true that it waits for me and you with its fountains of gold or have those dreams been sold? Just like same letters form a different name, maybe up there everything's the same. Ovo je odlično! Svaka čast. Razumiješ me? :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Troxley Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Thanks Fran! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alien Radio Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 I've been into this thing called dadaism recently Radiohead used that for their album "Kid A", that's mostly how I got into it Here's more about it: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dada http://www.madsci.org/~lynn/juju/surr/games/dada-poem.html So yeah, this is one my dada poems: We remain glad. Meeting about footsteps. Reckoning the Ice Age. Fleeing to the airport. Confident in denial. Thronged but not hopeless. Through odds of the halls, A ghost, echoing the multitudes we lost. Years ago. No one, less and less paid attention. Leading to the hurricanes. Of guilty men and women. Precarious 2nd World War. Favourable by the peril. The Ice Age. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted September 23, 2012 Share Posted September 23, 2012 Wow Anthony I love this :surprised: Thanks. Right now, I'm at my lowest, and when I'm at my lowest, I tend to come up with the most amazing pieces of work. Then again, isn't that how it works in art? I've been into this thing called dadaism recently Radiohead used that for their album "Kid A", that's mostly how I got into it Here's more about it: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dada http://www.madsci.org/~lynn/juju/surr/games/dada-poem.html So yeah, this is one my dada poems: We remain glad. Meeting about footsteps. Reckoning the Ice Age. Fleeing to the airport. Confident in denial. Thronged but not hopeless. Through odds of the halls, A ghost, echoing the multitudes we lost. Years ago. No one, less and less paid attention. Leading to the hurricanes. Of guilty men and women. Precarious 2nd World War. Favourable by the peril. The Ice Age. Also, I enjoyed reading this! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alien Radio Posted September 24, 2012 Share Posted September 24, 2012 Thanks. Right now, I'm at my lowest, and when I'm at my lowest, I tend to come up with the most amazing pieces of work. Then again, isn't that how it works in art? Also, I enjoyed reading this! Thanks:) Oh yes it is! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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