The_Escapist_229 Posted October 11, 2012 Share Posted October 11, 2012 Yup! I have enough inspiration for a few more poems. Another great poem! Thanks for sharing. As always, it's something that I can relate to. Thanks, Shredder! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted October 11, 2012 Share Posted October 11, 2012 That's really good. I think they'd make good lyrics ;) Thanks, Molly! Almost always, I do have a tune stuck in my head while writting, that was the case here too. Sometimes I end up with a whole song, with chorus and all, other times with just a few lines like these. I allways go where ad as far as inspiration is willing to take me and never wanna push it. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mollyxyloto Posted October 11, 2012 Share Posted October 11, 2012 Thanks, Molly! Almost always, I do have a tune stuck in my head while writting, that was the case here too. Sometimes I end up with a whole song, with chorus and all, other times with just a few lines like these. I allways go where ad as far as inspiration is willing to take me and never wanna push it. :) Can you play an instrument? Piano, guitar? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted October 11, 2012 Share Posted October 11, 2012 Can you play an instrument? Piano, guitar? Nope, writing is my only talent. :P But I do have a guitar and am planning on learning how to play it. Mostly I´m inspired by the music I listen to. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mollyxyloto Posted October 11, 2012 Share Posted October 11, 2012 Nope, writing is my only talent. :P But I do have a guitar and am planning on learning how to play it. Mostly I´m inspired by the music I listen to. Oh cool :D I play keyboard/piano but I can't write lyrics :cry::embarrassed: you have a talent! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted October 11, 2012 Share Posted October 11, 2012 Oh cool :D I play keyboard/piano but I can't write lyrics :cry::embarrassed: you have a talent! Thanks! I do what I can with words stuck in my mind. Hehehe I would love it to be able to play an instrument, but I´m a complete idiot when it comes to everything about music, except listening to it. :D If you wanna write your own lyrics, write down all that comes to your head, you never know when a poem will come to be. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mollyxyloto Posted October 12, 2012 Share Posted October 12, 2012 Most things I come up with are funny things... Like taking the mick out of terrible songs or if my friends do something silly haha nothing nice like what you write :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted October 12, 2012 Share Posted October 12, 2012 I remember of writing poems when I was nine and even prepared my book (hahahahahahaha, childhood dreams :P). My first real poem came when I was 17 and out of spite because we were reading French symbolists and I couldn´t understand a single word. I thought to myself if they can write a song that makes no sense so can I. :D I wrote a funny poe for a friend of mine, too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mollyxyloto Posted October 12, 2012 Share Posted October 12, 2012 I always think up of a tune in my head and then in disappears but if a song is good you'll remember it so its obviously no good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted October 12, 2012 Share Posted October 12, 2012 A good one will come one day. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted October 12, 2012 Share Posted October 12, 2012 While I'm finishing up my poem that I began work on over a week ago, here's one I wrote just now. It describes how the most simplest tasks cannot be accomplished all because of one person for whatever reason that be. This is called "The Void" It feels a little chilly in here. Looks like someone left a window open. May you please close it for me? I need to warm myself up. If you don't want to, I don't blame you but please know that I just want some comfort. I hear a knock on the door. It sounds very demanding. May you please answer that for me? I don't want any distractions. If you don't want to, I don't blame you but please know that I need some company. The frigid breeze leaves me frozen. The interruption leaves me annoyed. Down my spine, I feel the needles of ice and tension. In this room, the silence between you and I is what makes the void. Your voice echoes as I drift away from consciousness. Lay next to me, and together, we'll get some rest. The faucet in the bathroom plays a song. It's the best song I've heard all night. May you please turn the volume up? I need to get my music fix. If you don't want to, I don't blame you but please know that I need my kicks. The dancing images in my head are all red and black. To the beat, the colours are in sync. Sometimes, I wish these thoughts would take me back. I'd write these thoughts down for you, but my pen is out of ink. May you please give me yours? I don't want to write something that can be erased. If you don't want to, I don't blame you but please know that I don't want these thoughts to be replaced. http://allpoetry.com/poem/10047807-The_Void-by-shredder2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mollyxyloto Posted October 13, 2012 Share Posted October 13, 2012 This is called "The Void" It feels a little chilly in here. Looks like someone left a window open. May you please close it for me? I need to warm myself up. If you don't want to, I don't blame you but please know that I just want some comfort. I hear a knock on the door. It sounds very demanding. May you please answer that for me? I don't want any distractions. If you don't want to, I don't blame you but please know that I need some company. The frigid breeze leaves me frozen. The interruption leaves me annoyed. Down my spine, I feel the needles of ice and tension. In this room, the silence between you and I is what makes the void. Your voice echoes as I drift away from consciousness. Lay next to me, and together, we'll get some rest. The faucet in the bathroom plays a song. It's the best song I've heard all night. May you please turn the volume up? I need to get my music fix. If you don't want to, I don't blame you but please know that I need my kicks. The dancing images in my head are all red and black. To the beat, the colours are in sync. Sometimes, I wish these thoughts would take me back. I'd write these thoughts down for you, but my pen is out of ink. May you please give me yours? I don't want to write something that can be erased. If you don't want to, I don't blame you but please know that I don't want these thoughts to be replaced. http://allpoetry.com/poem/10047807-The_Void-by-shredder2 This is one of the best poems I have ever read, in fact it is my favourite and I've read it once. I've studied poetry in English and I much prefer this to ones I've previously read. I think it is brilliant. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted October 14, 2012 Share Posted October 14, 2012 This is one of the best poems I have ever read, in fact it is my favourite and I've read it once. I've studied poetry in English and I much prefer this to ones I've previously read. I think it is brilliant. Thank you. Although I don't consider it my best work, I'm working on others. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mollyxyloto Posted October 14, 2012 Share Posted October 14, 2012 If that isn't your best then woah. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bubbleymonki Posted November 7, 2012 Share Posted November 7, 2012 no more new poems?... hoping to hear some poetry tips for a novice like me. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alien Radio Posted November 7, 2012 Share Posted November 7, 2012 no more new poems?... hoping to hear some poetry tips for a novice like me. ;) "Trying to do anything is the death of creativity" ~ Jeff Mangum. I have this on the front page of my notebook. It's, like, the only rule that exists in art. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the scientist is dead Posted November 7, 2012 Share Posted November 7, 2012 "Trying to do anything is the death of creativity" ~ Jeff Mangum. I have this on the front page of my notebook. It's, like, the only rule that exists in art. :nod: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted November 7, 2012 Share Posted November 7, 2012 no more new poems?... hoping to hear some poetry tips for a novice like me. ;) Write down whatever comes to your mind, you don't know what might become a poem. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Escapist_229 Posted November 7, 2012 Share Posted November 7, 2012 Have I lost the power or should I say the curse that fell upon me, sour - taste of feelings that I nurse. For writing saves, but still, again, it hurts when words come out 'cause with them, every now and then, a demon strolls about. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bubbleymonki Posted November 8, 2012 Share Posted November 8, 2012 Thank you for the comments/advice. I stumbled upon this video, thought it was quite interesting/helpful to me. For those who are interested (sorry, it's a long vid): [ame=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XYd205YnHjI&feature=endscreen]How to Write a Good Poem (Part One) - YouTube[/ame] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Troxley Posted November 9, 2012 Share Posted November 9, 2012 Sea of Bitterness A sea of colour walks across the sky The grey and stormy ocean in your eye With waves of blue and with highlights of green As enchanting as anything I've ever seen So easy to miss or to pass without thought Will there ever be such a treasure that's sought To compare with what lies within that jewel Like a misty lake that is sweet and cool An iris of amethyst glittering bright A dark ocean scene with a great burst of light Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BarbaMama Posted November 9, 2012 Share Posted November 9, 2012 Here is a poem I posted a few weeks ago in the "post pictures of the gorgeous Chris" thread. I think it belongs here too. Made a little adjustment though. Hope you like it :) For me it is not the way he clothes, It's all about his do-es and don'ts I don't care about his eyes and curly hair, It is just the whole package, what is there Although there are the children and his wife It's especially the music that gives him drive He's funny, crazy and extremely talented, So much love and joy and so truly authentic He's got the talent not letting the mind overrule And thát is why he is so gigantic cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted November 9, 2012 Share Posted November 9, 2012 "In Reality" I haven't been forewarned on what was to come. I couldn't blame him. I couldn't blame you. Can life get anymore surprising? You and I both know that nothing can be undone. Nothing that you did. Nothing that I did. Do you now know what's missing? Faithful I could be to you, but I think it'd annoy you. Devoted I could be to you, but I doubt your kindness is true. I'd love to keep my options open, but there's only one for me. You're the one, but should I just let go of you and set you free? In my thoughts and dreams, you appear. In your thoughts and dreams, I fear. Am I there in your head like you are in mine or do you just forget about me and think that I'm a waste of time? In reality, you appear. In reality, I fear. It's like you jumped out of my imagination only to give me mixed signals that always appear to be ration. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Troxley Posted November 9, 2012 Share Posted November 9, 2012 Wow! That's really great Anthony! I love it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Texas Rez Posted November 9, 2012 Share Posted November 9, 2012 Thanks! I really do appreciate it at this point in time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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