aww' date=' thats really GOOD! :cool: You put me right there front and center :) I love "he's like a hallucination to me" cool ;) in fact, there's a lot of memorable lines in it, it'd make an awesome spoken word piece. Bravo! WOOOOOO!! :D[/quote']

 

:) Thanks for the kind words. I was pretty sure it sucked. :/

 

[edit: I decided the second one I'd posted was absolutely horrific and made me physically ill :sick2:, especially after taking a good look at the other things posted... so I flushed it. :toilet:]

yeah Ilike the first few lines greg..nice piece...

Im having writers block ppl..I think al the painting Ive been doing..have freid my creative brain cells :rolleyes: :cry:

thank ya Lois :) ....ooh writers block :/ ...yeah painting is mostly beyond my creative capacity, waay too much for me, writing takes up all my energy :rolleyes: :cool:

god bless vincent... :embarrased:

I wish I could go back

Not back a day or two

When I couldn’t get over the fact that I had just dyed my blue

Not back a few years ago

When the acne fest on my cheeks grew more and more

Not back in my late childhood

When the boy-girl relationship rules started coming…which I deliberately ignored

Not back at five or four

When I was a little demon child unleashing my wrath every hour

I wish I could go back

When this new fresh air rushed into my lungs

When this new light kissed my cheeks and graced my precious eyes

When voices and unidentifiable loved me unconditionally

When I was pure…

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I wrote this today aftering seeing my 11 th niece Caroline at the hospital today..she sooo beautifull... :blush:

wow, that's really lovely! :cool:

the lines all you wrote mean how sensitive people are to changes.

i think this kind of things make someone peacefull

that was inspired by my lil nieces...

I wish I could go back

Not back a day or two

When I couldn’t get over the fact that I had just dyed my blue

Not back a few years ago

When the acne fest on my cheeks grew more and more

Not back in my late childhood

When the boy-girl relationship rules started coming…which I deliberately ignored

Not back at five or four

When I was a little demon child unleashing my wrath every hour

I wish I could go back

When this new fresh air rushed into my lungs

When this new light kissed my cheeks and graced my precious eyes

When voices and unidentifiable loved me unconditionally

When I was pure…

----------

I wrote this today aftering seeing my 11 th niece Caroline at the hospital today..she sooo beautifull... :blush:

 

this is lovely lois :) I think there's this part of all of us who wish to go back to being pure, it's human nature, life taints us as we get old.

I wish I could go back

Not back a day or two

When I couldn’t get over the fact that I had just dyed my blue

Not back a few years ago

When the acne fest on my cheeks grew more and more

Not back in my late childhood

When the boy-girl relationship rules started coming…which I deliberately ignored

Not back at five or four

When I was a little demon child unleashing my wrath every hour

I wish I could go back

When this new fresh air rushed into my lungs

When this new light kissed my cheeks and graced my precious eyes

When voices and unidentifiable loved me unconditionally

When I was pure…

----------

I wrote this today aftering seeing my 11 th niece Caroline at the hospital today..she sooo beautifull... :blush:

 

 

 

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWW beautiful lois how ya been hun??

missed ya :wink3:

i love you 1 week

i love you 2 months

i love you 3 years

i love you 4 eva

 

:rolleyes:

Travelling Away

 

Rest not easy soul

It's trying to stay true enough

But you my dear

I'll tell you true enough

I'm true as i can be

 

But for thisd soul is

Strumbling down drunken roads

And now i find myself

Mistaken for someone else

I find i'm taken for someone else

 

We will walk through the ice and cold

Drunken defeat we await

These days, they continue

But we can ride up until today

Drunk, drunk and hungry

 

Two by two, we walked off this land

My soul now heavy upon thee

But swear I must not

And take i shall

For one is heavy on burden

 

Life is short, but sweet

Or so they say

We climb on, we stroll one

But all these days, they take their toll

And we shall rest here

 

Shut up, I'm thinking

That's my blood there

It's poured from the hands of angels

Pouring down the streets at night

And i'm lost without it

 

But if i had it, if i had it all

You know i'd fuck it up

For i'm poor at this excuse

And i can't even go free

And now my screams they come whispering out

 

I feel no-one can even see

Like a ghost i can't see myself, sometimes

And when you see the lord and devil dancing

Hand in hand, you know it's over now

And i'm ready to go

 

I'm ready, i'm ready

The light is near, the end is close

And now you remain, i'll go

Bury you, and drink the water

For soon i go

 

I look down, i look down

The mirror behind you, it shows the sadness

Stepped out and it's empty

You're sat there just waiting

Drinking your sorrows away

 

I'm gone, the body is empty

I am driving away, away from here

It felt good to go, it felt oh so good

As the tears stroll on you

I felt a sigh, and now it's blank

i love you 1 week

i love you 2 months

i love you 3 years

i love you 4 eva

 

:rolleyes:

 

:rolleyes: :idea2: forget homer!...this is what i call poetry

If you come as softly

as the wind within the trees.

You may hear what I hear,

See what sorrows sees.

If you come as lightly

as threading dew,

I will take you gladly,

nor ask more of you.

Travelling Away

 

Rest not easy soul

It's trying to stay true enough

But you my dear

I'll tell you true enough

I'm true as i can be

 

But for thisd soul is

Strumbling down drunken roads

And now i find myself

Mistaken for someone else

I find i'm taken for someone else

 

We will walk through the ice and cold

Drunken defeat we await

These days, they continue

But we can ride up until today

Drunk, drunk and hungry

 

Two by two, we walked off this land

My soul now heavy upon thee

But swear I must not

And take i shall

For one is heavy on burden

 

Life is short, but sweet

Or so they say

We climb on, we stroll one

But all these days, they take their toll

And we shall rest here

 

Shut up, I'm thinking

That's my blood there

It's poured from the hands of angels

Pouring down the streets at night

And i'm lost without it

 

But if i had it, if i had it all

You know i'd fuck it up

For i'm poor at this excuse

And i can't even go free

And now my screams they come whispering out

 

I feel no-one can even see

Like a ghost i can't see myself, sometimes

And when you see the lord and devil dancing

Hand in hand, you know it's over now

And i'm ready to go

 

I'm ready, i'm ready

The light is near, the end is close

And now you remain, i'll go

Bury you, and drink the water

For soon i go

 

I look down, i look down

The mirror behind you, it shows the sadness

Stepped out and it's empty

You're sat there just waiting

Drinking your sorrows away

 

I'm gone, the body is empty

I am driving away, away from here

It felt good to go, it felt oh so good

As the tears stroll on you

I felt a sigh, and now it's blank

 

:o Holy Dave Matthews allusions! :D

yaaaay!

 

finally someone reckognised. yeah i "borrowed" some lyrics, added my own stuff, mixed it up

i love you 1 week

i love you 2 months

i love you 3 years

i love you 4 eva

 

:rolleyes:

 

:rolleyes: :idea2: forget homer!...this is what i call poetry

 

i havent seen you do any so far so speak for ya self scheizhund

:huh: :o

:rolleyes:

i love you 1 week

i love you 2 months

i love you 3 years

i love you 4 eva

 

:rolleyes:

 

:rolleyes: :idea2: forget homer!...this is what i call poetry

 

i havent seen you do any so far so speak for ya self scheizhund

 

"WUFF WUFF"

BUMP CAUSE IM BACK

duh

sooki Snoop there is a bigger thread than this one in the entertainment & Arts section...:wacko:

 

http://www.coldplaying.com/forum/showthread.php?t=20149&highlight=poets