January 13, 200917 yr I'm in the process of writing a song, and it's not done yet, but I am very eager to post it and have feedback! Ocean of Confusion (Verse 1) In the heart of the ocean Lies a story of fiction The ocean of confusion Unlocks it's secrets (Verse 2) I sail through the day Checking off my list Searching for something That does not exist (Chorus) The ocean of confusion Washes over me Now I can see It's pulling me under No breath to breathe I pray to thee (Verse 3) The freezing temperatures The medicine and the cures Are no match For this ruthless disease (Bridge?) I'm Fighting this, fighting this, fighting this Trying this, trying this, and trying this To the sea, to the sea, to the sea For the key, for the key, for the key (Verse 4) To unlock this mystery This madness that's Taking over me (Instrumental) That's all I have so far, and I know that it's difficult to imagine without the piano I made with it, especially the rhythm of the lyrics, but any feedback would be awesome! I will try my best to get a video up of me and the piano as soon as I can! Thank you!
January 13, 200917 yr I love it! I can't really come up with anything i think you could improve right now. Looking forward to read/hear more:smug:
January 13, 200917 yr Real good lyrics man :) Post up a video of you singing it and playing it on the piano, that would be great :D
January 13, 200917 yr Of course I was like, OMG! A new Coldplay song? :laugh3: It's really good so far...I love the lyrics.
January 13, 200917 yr you're a poet! ;) go on writing i'll wait for reading more.. is the music fast or slow?
January 13, 200917 yr Author Real good lyrics man :) Post up a video of you singing it and playing it on the piano, that would be great :D I would but unfortunately I don't own a video camera, but maybe i could steal my little brothers for a few minutes:sneaky: but I'll try to do it as soon as i can
January 13, 200917 yr Author you're a poet! ;) go on writing i'll wait for reading more.. is the music fast or slow? Thank you! It's all over the place really. fast, slow, medium, anything really. I'm still trying to get it in order
January 14, 200917 yr The chorus is fantastic If you need any help w/ lyrics or music you can always come to me. I am a songwriter and guitarist so I can help you out if you ever need it. Sometimes it's nice to brainstorm;)
January 14, 200917 yr Author Thanks! One day I just put on the song "Enter the Lovely" by Bluetech (it's techno), and I just sat at the piano and wrote for the whole 8 minutes the song went on. I felt like I was just in a trance, but this song was inspired by a poster in my math class lol. I'm gonna get a pic of it and put it up here
January 14, 200917 yr Thanks! One day I just put on the song "Enter the Lovely" by Bluetech (it's techno), and I just sat at the piano and wrote for the whole 8 minutes the song went on. I felt like I was just in a trance, but this song was inspired by a poster in my math class lol. I'm gonna get a pic of it and put it up here I am the same way. My best songs I didn't remember writing. I just sat and they poured out of me. those you know are good because they're not you thinking, they are you feeling
January 14, 200917 yr Author Yeah and I can't write a song if I have a title or subject picked out because it limits my ideas.
January 14, 200917 yr Yeah and I can't write a song if I have a title or subject picked out because it limits my ideas. I sometimes find it helps to write with a subject in mind if you are in a slump. sometimes you just can't write one off the top of your head.
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