Yup! I have enough inspiration for a few more poems.

 

 

Another great poem! Thanks for sharing. As always, it's something that I can relate to.

 

 

Thanks, Shredder! :)

That's really good. I think they'd make good lyrics ;)

 

Thanks, Molly! Almost always, I do have a tune stuck in my head while writting, that was the case here too. Sometimes I end up with a whole song, with chorus and all, other times with just a few lines like these. I allways go where ad as far as inspiration is willing to take me and never wanna push it. :)

Thanks, Molly! Almost always, I do have a tune stuck in my head while writting, that was the case here too. Sometimes I end up with a whole song, with chorus and all, other times with just a few lines like these. I allways go where ad as far as inspiration is willing to take me and never wanna push it. :)

 

Can you play an instrument? Piano, guitar?

Can you play an instrument? Piano, guitar?

 

Nope, writing is my only talent. :P But I do have a guitar and am planning on learning how to play it. Mostly I´m inspired by the music I listen to.

Nope, writing is my only talent. :P But I do have a guitar and am planning on learning how to play it. Mostly I´m inspired by the music I listen to.

 

Oh cool :D I play keyboard/piano but I can't write lyrics :cry::embarrassed:

you have a talent!

Oh cool :D I play keyboard/piano but I can't write lyrics :cry::embarrassed:

you have a talent!

 

 

Thanks! I do what I can with words stuck in my mind. Hehehe I would love it to be able to play an instrument, but I´m a complete idiot when it comes to everything about music, except listening to it. :D If you wanna write your own lyrics, write down all that comes to your head, you never know when a poem will come to be. :)

Most things I come up with are funny things... Like taking the mick out of terrible songs or if my friends do something silly haha nothing nice like what you write :P

I remember of writing poems when I was nine and even prepared my book (hahahahahahaha, childhood dreams :P). My first real poem came when I was 17 and out of spite because we were reading French symbolists and I couldn´t understand a single word. I thought to myself if they can write a song that makes no sense so can I. :D I wrote a funny poe for a friend of mine, too.

I always think up of a tune in my head and then in disappears but if a song is good you'll remember it so its obviously no good.

A good one will come one day. :D

While I'm finishing up my poem that I began work on over a week ago, here's one I wrote just now. It describes how the most simplest tasks cannot be accomplished all because of one person for whatever reason that be.

 

This is called "The Void"

 

It feels a little chilly in here.

Looks like someone left a window open.

May you please close it for me?

I need to warm myself up.

If you don't want to, I don't blame you

but please know that I just want some comfort.

 

I hear a knock on the door.

It sounds very demanding.

May you please answer that for me?

I don't want any distractions.

If you don't want to, I don't blame you

but please know that I need some company.

 

The frigid breeze leaves me frozen.

The interruption leaves me annoyed.

Down my spine, I feel the needles of ice and tension.

In this room, the silence between you and I is what makes the void.

Your voice echoes as I drift away from consciousness.

Lay next to me, and together, we'll get some rest.

 

The faucet in the bathroom plays a song.

It's the best song I've heard all night.

May you please turn the volume up?

I need to get my music fix.

If you don't want to, I don't blame you

but please know that I need my kicks.

 

The dancing images in my head are all red and black.

To the beat, the colours are in sync.

Sometimes, I wish these thoughts would take me back.

I'd write these thoughts down for you, but my pen is out of ink.

May you please give me yours?

I don't want to write something that can be erased.

If you don't want to, I don't blame you

but please know that I don't want these thoughts to be replaced.

 

http://allpoetry.com/poem/10047807-The_Void-by-shredder2

 

This is called "The Void"

 

It feels a little chilly in here.

Looks like someone left a window open.

May you please close it for me?

I need to warm myself up.

If you don't want to, I don't blame you

but please know that I just want some comfort.

 

I hear a knock on the door.

It sounds very demanding.

May you please answer that for me?

I don't want any distractions.

If you don't want to, I don't blame you

but please know that I need some company.

 

The frigid breeze leaves me frozen.

The interruption leaves me annoyed.

Down my spine, I feel the needles of ice and tension.

In this room, the silence between you and I is what makes the void.

Your voice echoes as I drift away from consciousness.

Lay next to me, and together, we'll get some rest.

 

The faucet in the bathroom plays a song.

It's the best song I've heard all night.

May you please turn the volume up?

I need to get my music fix.

If you don't want to, I don't blame you

but please know that I need my kicks.

 

The dancing images in my head are all red and black.

To the beat, the colours are in sync.

Sometimes, I wish these thoughts would take me back.

I'd write these thoughts down for you, but my pen is out of ink.

May you please give me yours?

I don't want to write something that can be erased.

If you don't want to, I don't blame you

but please know that I don't want these thoughts to be replaced.

 

http://allpoetry.com/poem/10047807-The_Void-by-shredder2

 

This is one of the best poems I have ever read, in fact it is my favourite and I've read it once. I've studied poetry in English and I much prefer this to ones I've previously read. I think it is brilliant.

This is one of the best poems I have ever read, in fact it is my favourite and I've read it once. I've studied poetry in English and I much prefer this to ones I've previously read. I think it is brilliant.

 

Thank you. Although I don't consider it my best work, I'm working on others.

If that isn't your best then woah.

no more new poems?... hoping to hear some poetry tips for a novice like me. ;)

no more new poems?... hoping to hear some poetry tips for a novice like me. ;)

 

"Trying to do anything is the death of creativity" ~ Jeff Mangum.

I have this on the front page of my notebook. It's, like, the only rule that exists in art.

"Trying to do anything is the death of creativity" ~ Jeff Mangum.

I have this on the front page of my notebook. It's, like, the only rule that exists in art.

 

:nod:

no more new poems?... hoping to hear some poetry tips for a novice like me. ;)

 

Write down whatever comes to your mind, you don't know what might become a poem. :D

Have I lost the power

or should I say the curse

that fell upon me, sour -

taste of feelings that I nurse.

 

For writing saves, but still, again,

it hurts when words come out

'cause with them, every now and then,

a demon strolls about.

Thank you for the comments/advice.

I stumbled upon this video, thought it was quite interesting/helpful to me. For those who are interested (sorry, it's a long vid):

[ame=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XYd205YnHjI&feature=endscreen]How to Write a Good Poem (Part One) - YouTube[/ame]

Sea of Bitterness

 

A sea of colour walks across the sky

The grey and stormy ocean in your eye

With waves of blue and with highlights of green

As enchanting as anything I've ever seen

So easy to miss or to pass without thought

Will there ever be such a treasure that's sought

To compare with what lies within that jewel

Like a misty lake that is sweet and cool

An iris of amethyst glittering bright

A dark ocean scene with a great burst of light

 

Here is a poem I posted a few weeks ago in the "post pictures of the gorgeous Chris" thread.

I think it belongs here too. Made a little adjustment though. Hope you like it :)

 

 

For me it is not the way he clothes,

It's all about his do-es and don'ts

 

I don't care about his eyes and curly hair,

It is just the whole package, what is there

 

Although there are the children and his wife

It's especially the music that gives him drive

 

He's funny, crazy and extremely talented,

So much love and joy and so truly authentic

 

He's got the talent not letting the mind overrule

And thát is why he is so gigantic cool

"In Reality"

 

I haven't been forewarned on what was to come.

I couldn't blame him.

I couldn't blame you.

Can life get anymore surprising?

You and I both know that nothing can be undone.

Nothing that you did.

Nothing that I did.

Do you now know what's missing?

 

Faithful I could be to you, but I think it'd annoy you.

Devoted I could be to you, but I doubt your kindness is true.

I'd love to keep my options open, but there's only one for me.

You're the one, but should I just let go of you and set you free?

 

In my thoughts and dreams, you appear.

In your thoughts and dreams, I fear.

Am I there in your head like you are in mine

or do you just forget about me and think that I'm a waste of time?

In reality, you appear.

In reality, I fear.

It's like you jumped out of my imagination

only to give me mixed signals that always appear to be ration.

Wow! That's really great Anthony! I love it!

Thanks! I really do appreciate it at this point in time.