Ireentje Posted July 29, 2005 Author Share Posted July 29, 2005 And another one, I have quite a collection you know :P On stepping out. Some poise a gun against the temple Or step off a bridge on a warm Sunday morning And forever stand as a public example: A hideous and cruel children's warning Some accuse those of blatant cowardice And judge them so easily, quick and unfair Apparently they've never felt how it is To feel depression, pain, despair But most of us, we walk around In the vast maze of our existence And try to prove the best resistance we can, to keep our feet on solid ground So some place the gun against their head And in the bullet, find relief But what's the point in that happiness? You don't feel it when you're dead. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matter-Eater Lad Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 if i had any balls i'd post some of my stuff on here. lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 wait! Hold on.. I haven't finished reading the first one and you already posted another two?! :P :P :P Don't post more until I finish reading :lol: :embarrased: :P I think that says I'm a slow reader.. :shifty: No.. I'm not..I was just checking my message I received a few minutes ago.. :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ireentje Posted July 29, 2005 Author Share Posted July 29, 2005 Right :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ireentje Posted July 29, 2005 Author Share Posted July 29, 2005 Drawing to go along with last poem: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Very good Irene :kiss: I write loads of crap too ( just stories though, I'm terrible at poetry)... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Very good Irene :kiss: I write loads of crap too ( just stories though, I'm terrible at poetry)... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Very good Irene :kiss: I write loads of crap too ( just stories though, I'm terrible at poetry)... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Very good Irene :kiss: I write loads of crap too ( just stories though, I'm terrible at poetry)... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Very good Irene :kiss: I write loads of crap too ( just stories though, I'm terrible at poetry)... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Very good Irene :kiss: I write loads of crap too ( just stories though, I'm terrible at poetry)... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Okies, I just finished reading all of them.. The best one I liked was the last one, I really the message it gives.. Thumbs up :thumbsup: :thumbsup: ... On the first one, very good writting but I didn't like the ending.. :embarrased: The second one, I also really liked a lot.. it was very nice and simple... ;) On the third one....was the least one I liked... :curtain: btw, very nice drawing ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Oh dear, what the hell happened there? I'm very sorry :embarrased: (I'll hide now) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 awww burningmonk..you kept on clicking! :lol: :D It's okay.. you can edit them though :idea2: well if you want... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Damn my immature teenage impatience :angry: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 so where did Irene go? She didn't see my reply :( :bigcry: :( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
seventeen seconds Posted July 30, 2005 Share Posted July 30, 2005 Irene! :) This is great writing, I especially liked the short story. Good stuff, keep it up! ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
colduser Posted July 30, 2005 Share Posted July 30, 2005 Irene, for some reason I didn't see this thread until tonight :embarrased: Thanks for sharing your wonderful writing. I'll be pleased if you keep updating this thread :kiss: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lilchick629 Posted July 30, 2005 Share Posted July 30, 2005 wow---what a great thread----what great writing----never give up this huge talent u have :P u will seriously harm this world if u stop writing---i feel so talentless *hides under the bed sheets* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
burningmonk Posted July 30, 2005 Share Posted July 30, 2005 I completely ruined this thread.. :embarrased: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lilchick629 Posted July 30, 2005 Share Posted July 30, 2005 nah----you just like to stutter alot---he he he :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ireentje Posted July 31, 2005 Author Share Posted July 31, 2005 Got another one for you all... Not exactly a poem, more like thinking over things... Cage Got nothing to complain: I'm not hungry I'm not poor Plenty of good books to read Get good grades in school And I can always go outside Or ride my bike, practice sports I've got a nice view from my window Two parents and a little brother, Loads of friends so enough company Live in a wealthy, peaceful country But still, sometimes, it can feel like The food comes in through a slide in the door Which by the way has a huge bald guy With a stick in front of it And cameras in the hallway And the money isn't mine, I have to earn it by behaving properly And doing my duties five hours a day The exercise is regulated and guarded The books are all the same Because they come from the same shelf in my room Four o'clock's visiting hour And lights out at ten And bars in front of the windows Through which I always see The walls with the barbed wire And the big gate at the end of the lane... Funny, that no matter how free you are, you always remain to be an inmate to yourself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ireentje Posted July 31, 2005 Author Share Posted July 31, 2005 And this one. It's short, but I felt quite okay about the way it turned out. Shore Struggling to reach the surface Failing lungs and flailing limbs Breathing water, in and out Sunk away in layers of blue Missed the red flag, missed the warnings Missed the tide rising to top But it was so warm, so comfortable, So sweet To drown in you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
colduser Posted July 31, 2005 Share Posted July 31, 2005 Great stuff again Irene. I especially liked Shore. I can relate to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ireentje Posted August 1, 2005 Author Share Posted August 1, 2005 Thanks Aaron :kiss: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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