Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 10, 2009 Share Posted August 10, 2009 julia if you teach me german, if i be a quick learner as i'm with finnish, may i'll be able to understand what your german poem says in a week. :wacko: want to teach me? :nice: btw congrats that you write something again. :D --- i really liked "we are a path" mikamay. @ dream too late: i like the two last lines :) @ strawberryswinger: indeed best so far ;) and i'm sure melody for that one will be great too, am i mistaken? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
strawberryswinger Posted August 10, 2009 Share Posted August 10, 2009 @ strawberryswinger: indeed best so far ;) and i'm sure melody for that one will be great too, am i mistaken? thanks. well, it's pretty catchy, but just chords. it's meant to be played on piano :thinking: a demo of it: http://www.mediafire.com/?wrzyzdbti2w Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gitta Rensolo Posted August 10, 2009 Share Posted August 10, 2009 well I could teach you Ari...but I am afraid you still wouldn't understand it....because "I play with words" and I didn't use full sentences...oh and in two lines I play with grammar...and in the last two lines I play with views...:wacky: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gitta Rensolo Posted August 10, 2009 Share Posted August 10, 2009 well I could teach you Ari...but I am afraid you still wouldn't understand it....because "I play with words" and I didn't use full sentences...oh and in two lines I play with grammar...and in the last two lines I play with views...:wacky: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 10, 2009 Share Posted August 10, 2009 thanks. well, it's pretty catchy, but just chords. it's meant to be played on piano :thinking: a demo of it: http://www.mediafire.com/?wrzyzdbti2w thanks i'm downloading it already. (and i was suppoused to no download anything in those two months :uhoh: too late now) well I could teach you Ari...but I am afraid you still wouldn't understand it....because "I play with words" and I didn't use full sentences...oh and in two lines I play with grammar...and in the last two lines I play with views...:wacky: you want me i end scared of german and give up my intentions to learn it once more? :\ i'll learn it anyways and understand your poem, that's a challenge now. ;) now more serious: great that you've done that, playing with words is great. :wacky: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
strawberryswinger Posted August 11, 2009 Share Posted August 11, 2009 LITTLE SIREN Hey siren Where have you been? I've missed your cheering And your summer skin It's been so long the guys are nice my teddybears are fine. And I Whispered a word in the dark We could meet tonight My siren we should meet and chat and keep with our things they were lots of fun And the dancing and singing to songs that no one really wrote And I Whispered a word in the dark We could meet tonight Oh siren i don't get you why do you think we shouldn't meet right after school And you leave again? I can do what you wish i can act as a man And I Don't want to let this die Some people grow up fast You know those stories where little boy and little girl are friends, then the girl leaves and when she returns she's grown up and thinks the boy is so childish, so the relationship is over? this is about it. so sad, i think. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted August 15, 2009 Share Posted August 15, 2009 well you know girls think of themselves as 'grownups' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
strawberryswinger Posted August 15, 2009 Share Posted August 15, 2009 well yes, it's always the girl and not the boy in this kind of stories. but there's some truth in the fact that girls grow up earlier than boys. don't you think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted August 15, 2009 Share Posted August 15, 2009 well yes, it's always the girl and not the boy in this kind of stories. but there's some truth in the fact that girls grow up earlier than boys. don't you think? Everybody knows that.. girls mature faster.. it is kinda sad :( strawberry, I thought you were a girl.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
strawberryswinger Posted August 15, 2009 Share Posted August 15, 2009 why? am i that girlish? :uhoh: i'm ed, you were.... vivi? :thinking: i don't remember.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
w1ll1am7 Posted August 15, 2009 Share Posted August 15, 2009 Hi, I would be interested in posting some of my poetry and lyrics on this thread, but nobody takes anything right? It belongs to the poster? :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 why? am i that girlish? :uhoh: i'm ed, you were.... vivi? :thinking: i don't remember.. no no no You are not girly.. I just thought you were because of strawberry.. :shy: Hello Ed..nice to meet you.. I'm Viri not Vivi..close....very close.:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 Okay let's write something...... Hmmmm :thinking2: Untitled: As loneliness comes & I drown on your empty words tell me where have you gone? because after so long you are still so clear in the mist of all... as loneliness comes it brings my fear and I search for you in every gaze because in every gaze in every touch I long for you Tell me when will it stop? As it comes crawling back deeper once more there's nothing more I can do.. ------ okay that sucked! :sick2: I just wrote it.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
strawberryswinger Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 Hi, I would be interested in posting some of my poetry and lyrics on this thread, but nobody takes anything right? It belongs to the poster? :) of course! we're very nice here haha :nice: feel free to post everything you come up with!;) no no no You are not girly.. I just thought you were because of strawberry.. :shy: Hello Ed..nice to meet you.. I'm Viri not Vivi..close....very close.:) :uhoh: almost! nice to meet you too :nice: Okay let's write something...... Hmmmm :thinking2: Untitled: As loneliness comes & I drown on your empty words tell me where have you gone? because after so long you are still so clear in the mist of all... as loneliness comes it brings my fear and I search for you in every gaze because in every gaze in every touch I long for you Tell me when will it stop? As it comes crawling back deeper once more there's nothing more I can do.. ------ okay that sucked! :sick2: I just wrote it.. oh i like it, specially the first three paragraphs, full of emotion and very descriptive. sometimes things come up without even wanting to write..:thinking: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
w1ll1am7 Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 okay, well here is my first one. it's a couple of years old, and it's about re-finding a lost love. A Full Circle I never thought that two Could feel the same as one Every time I see you It’s like the rising sun You entice me with warmth And a tingling of love This feeling has been there For time that has stood still Without you, I am ill Medicine to heal my wounds I want something That’s never been had before And you give Needing something That’s never been given before Things have been a full circle Going back to the start I’d hold you in my arms If you’d give me your heart A full circle of feelings Re-invented beginnings A full circle of feelings Its my love that you’re stealing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 i really liked it william :) good one viri, as edu said, sometimes good poems come when you don't plan them really :) about your question william: i think as we did an album for which benefit was for charity (check coldplaying charity club sub-forum), it would be nice to make a book containing the poems/lyrics posted on this thread :) is just an idea i had some months ago. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
w1ll1am7 Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 i really liked it william :) about your question william: i think as we did an album for which benefit was for charity (check coldplaying charity club sub-forum), it would be nice to make a book containing the poems/lyrics posted on this thread :) is just an idea i had some months ago. Hey, I'm glad you liked it. I have plenty more that I can post. maybe one a day or something. I have 100+ song lyrics too, that's something I hold dear to me. Some are good, but a lot are just rubbish! And that's a good idea, if you go through with it, let me know because I'm in, it's technically getting published, so why not? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 Hey, I'm glad you liked it. I have plenty more that I can post. maybe one a day or something. I have 100+ song lyrics too, that's something I hold dear to me. Some are good, but a lot are just rubbish! And that's a good idea, if you go through with it, let me know because I'm in, it's technically getting published, so why not? you are welcome, and thanks a lot for finally sharing. :) wow you are so devoted, that's great. :D since how long have you been writing poetry/lyrics? you write other genres (plays, essays, novels..?), have you musicalized your lyrics? oh well i'm sure most them are good. i'll study that for the next months, i think a digital release will be easier than a printed one, well is just an idea. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
w1ll1am7 Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 you are welcome, and thanks a lot for finally sharing. :) wow you are so devoted, that's great. :D since how long have you been writing poetry/lyrics? you write other genres (plays, essays, novels..?), have you musicalized your lyrics? oh well i'm sure most them are good. i'll study that for the next months, i think a digital release will be easier than a printed one, well is just an idea. :) I'm glad that I can share here! :) and I've been writing since the 8th grade, so 5/6 years now. I am working on a novel at the moment, but that's something I can't rush because I really want it to be special, it's been in the works for a while, but now I'm restarting and making it great! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 Lots of writers here :D Thanks guys! I just didn't like it... hmmm.. :thinking2: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
w1ll1am7 Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 Lots of writers here :D Thanks guys! I just didn't like it... hmmm.. :thinking2: what didn't you like? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 I'm glad that I can share here! :) and I've been writing since the 8th grade, so 5/6 years now. I am working on a novel at the moment, but that's something I can't rush because I really want it to be special, it's been in the works for a while, but now I'm restarting and making it great! and we are thanked for that :) so long time. :D oh i'm sure it'll be great, don't worry too much in going through those periods of working on it and leave it for some time. :) work on it when you feel good is better than rush yourself to finish it soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
w1ll1am7 Posted August 17, 2009 Share Posted August 17, 2009 and we are thanked for that :) so long time. :D oh i'm sure it'll be great, don't worry too much in going through those periods of working on it and leave it for some time. :) work on it when you feel good is better than rush yourself to finish it soon. Oh i know, i know. I started 2 years ago and got 7 chapters complete, at decent length, however i re-read them after a long 2 year hiatus of not writing, I just wasn't motivated and then I decided to develop more story and content and re-write it. I'm happy with my first chapter and I'm slowly working on the second, I've planned 15 chapters for part 1 of the book, there is part 2 which i will develop once the first is completed! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LiquidSky Posted August 18, 2009 Share Posted August 18, 2009 what didn't you like? Hmm I'm not sure.. I didn't like the 3rd part and it ends abruptly.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
w1ll1am7 Posted August 18, 2009 Share Posted August 18, 2009 well sorry to disappoint you, but one dissatisfied reader is not going to stop me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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