August 19, 200916 yr Oh, wow. I really love this poem. thanks, i do like it too:smug: those are amazing Eric, so descriptive, and good atmosphere-creating.:thumbsup:
August 20, 200916 yr okay so here is one of my song lyrics that i wrote this year! tell me what you think! :) Rear-View Mirror This comes Through my rotten soul The hardness To my blackened core But I come alive Washed away I can’t seek An honest other day Look at everything passing behind you See the faces and landscapes change In my rear-view mirror I see The colours of the things I didn’t know The truth behind the things I didn’t know I finally know the way I should go I’m moving out In the right direction now Though my compass is wrong I’m not going back But I come alive Washed away I can’t seek An honest other day Look at everything passing behind you See the faces and landscapes change In my rear-view mirror I see The colours of the things I didn’t know The truth behind the things I didn’t know I finally know the way I should go I won’t look behind me I won’t look behind me I won’t look behind me I won’t look behind me See the things that I should see Be the person that I really need But I come alive Washed away I can’t seek An honest other day Look at everything passing behind you See the faces and landscapes change In my rear-view mirror I see The colours of the things I didn’t know The truth behind the things I didn’t know I finally know the way I should go I won’t look behind me I won’t look behind me
August 23, 200916 yr So heres mine i thought i'll contribute it was an english project so i had to take the first line from the brilliant shakespeare :) anyway Hope you like :) x From you i have been absent. Absent in the spring Although we're apart now it doesn't change a thing hath put a spirit on you of your youth and everything That the guards of hell laughed and jumped along with him How should i compare thee? Thee and all the guilt When we are apart Our love is unbuilt x
August 23, 200916 yr your such a good poet i could never write like that long :O whats ur name ? :) x
August 23, 200916 yr My name is William. That's just one lyric! I have over 100 of those! I have a sonnet to post next! it is a Shakespearean Sonnet :) --------------------------- Lover’s Eulogy I sit in stupor and praise that amidst the summer shine, my fidelity will withstand these difficult days. Strange it may be to heed how she confides, with or without my infatuated memory. I expel myself under a new shadow, meanwhile I should partake in ceremony. Reminisce about what you were, my auxiliary fellow, consequently I never leer at the glass. Tinted yes, but luminous all the same. As I once used to hunker during mass, querying my savior to purge my blame. It was my negligence leading to your slip, but your memory I will eternally bind, clenched within my grip.
August 23, 200916 yr aww william i love ur poems cant wait for the sonnet Im emma thanks for the add :) ! x
August 23, 200916 yr i tend to write things that are sad! here is another one! ----------------------------------- Again (What You Took) You’re a lucky one Things keep on coming back You’re a lucky one I keep on coming back Washed far away Just for today Disappearing In and out The pulsing cords in my veins Break the bonds And tear the chains Keep me up Then back again Back again Rushing to my head I think of you Rushing to my head I won’t forget you The pulsing cords in my veins Break the bonds And tear the chains Keep me up Then back again Back again Move me Trapped all night Hit me Held all night The pulsing cords in my veins Break the bonds And tear the chains Keep me up Then back again Back again
August 23, 200916 yr Omg ! :cry: will its really good I love the part ' The pulsing cords in my veins Break the bonds And tear the chains ' :) x
September 11, 200916 yr i tend to write things that are sad! here is another one! ----------------------------------- Again (What You Took) You’re a lucky one Things keep on coming back You’re a lucky one I keep on coming back Washed far away Just for today Disappearing In and out The pulsing cords in my veins Break the bonds And tear the chains Keep me up Then back again Back again Rushing to my head I think of you Rushing to my head I won’t forget you The pulsing cords in my veins Break the bonds And tear the chains Keep me up Then back again Back again Move me Trapped all night Hit me Held all night The pulsing cords in my veins Break the bonds And tear the chains Keep me up Then back again Back again I LOVE THIS ONE! seriously, grab a guitar and paste some chords in there! :P and after some rubbish, here's the first decent lyric i've written in many, many days :disappointed: FIRST TRIES NEVER MAKE SENSE Same pretty faces than ten miuntes before singing loud to a love song in a drunken singalong Tied to the wrists around her evil waist Wondering what may i say not to awake the beast in a room full of animals around I'm not a target and you're not nineteen but you look so beautiful inside your skin failing to escape then giving up to try tongue-tied and surprised but laying on a cloud Sweaty perfect bodies swimming in champagne wondering what may i say not to awake the beast in a room full of animals around I'm not a target and you're not nineteen but you look so beautiful inside your skin in a room full of animals around in a room full of animals around in a room full of animals around
September 12, 200916 yr really? thanks so much, I have put my voice to a couple songs, but i need to learn an instrument. I really want to do something to my music! :D
September 12, 200916 yr I do have an acoustic and a bass, however i need to get around to learning how to play! :P I have two new ones I want to post, it's about losing someone you love, obviously :)
September 23, 200916 yr Jonny, broken smile see how this turns out into autumn and, if i can i'll be flying with the leafs so far cry, cry. Boiling ancient house ghosts are coming like strangers i don't mean to fight wondering if i might try try, try I am wasted time don't even try to rescue me no, don't rescue me I've done what i had to do I've done what i had to do on this monday afternoon Jonny, love of mine see me vanish like the sand through your hands keep my shadow we can stroll in endless ways ways, ways I am wasted time don't even try to rescue me no, don't rescue me I've done what i had to do I've done what i had to do on this monday afternoon I'll be fine where sunflowers meet the sun meet me on the sun meet me on the sun meet me under the sun very cheesy :cheesy:
September 23, 200916 yr cheesy, but i like it. songs and writing like that tend to be the best writing! :) I have another, hang on a sec.... Falling From The Seams we've said goodbye for now it won't be long my dear your beauty waits my company the pain i take for this love i guess you should read and try to see without you here I'm falling from the seams just hold me close i'll follow through and try to see without you here my lovely dear i'm saddened yes, and falling from the seams this distance is simply killing me i wish you'd try and reach out your soul waits its partner the things i'd do for you i guess you should read and try to see without you here I'm falling from the seams just hold me close i'll follow through and try to see without you here my lovely dear i'm saddened yes, and falling from the seams it's like nothing else matters you're the only one know that forever this life of mine is yours i guess you should read and try to see without you here I'm falling from the seams just hold me close i'll follow through and try to see without you here my lovely dear i'm saddened yes, and falling from the seams
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