julia if you teach me german, if i be a quick learner as i'm with finnish, may i'll be able to understand what your german poem says in a week. :wacko:

want to teach me? :nice:

 

btw congrats that you write something again. :D

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i really liked "we are a path" mikamay.

 

@ dream too late: i like the two last lines :)

 

@ strawberryswinger: indeed best so far ;) and i'm sure melody for that one will be great too, am i mistaken?

@ strawberryswinger: indeed best so far ;) and i'm sure melody for that one will be great too, am i mistaken?

 

thanks. well, it's pretty catchy, but just chords. it's meant to be played on piano :thinking:

 

a demo of it: http://www.mediafire.com/?wrzyzdbti2w

well I could teach you Ari...but I am afraid you still wouldn't understand it....because "I play with words" and I didn't use full sentences...oh and in two lines I play with grammar...and in the last two lines I play with views...:wacky:

well I could teach you Ari...but I am afraid you still wouldn't understand it....because "I play with words" and I didn't use full sentences...oh and in two lines I play with grammar...and in the last two lines I play with views...:wacky:

thanks. well, it's pretty catchy, but just chords. it's meant to be played on piano :thinking:

 

a demo of it: http://www.mediafire.com/?wrzyzdbti2w

thanks i'm downloading it already. (and i was suppoused to no download anything in those two months :uhoh: too late now)

 

well I could teach you Ari...but I am afraid you still wouldn't understand it....because "I play with words" and I didn't use full sentences...oh and in two lines I play with grammar...and in the last two lines I play with views...:wacky:

you want me i end scared of german and give up my intentions to learn it once more? :\

 

i'll learn it anyways and understand your poem, that's a challenge now. ;)

 

now more serious: great that you've done that, playing with words is great. :wacky:

LITTLE SIREN

 

Hey siren

Where have you been?

I've missed your cheering

And your summer skin

It's been so long

the guys are nice

my teddybears are fine.

 

And I

Whispered a word in the dark

We could meet tonight

 

My siren

we should meet and chat

and keep with our things

they were lots of fun

And the dancing

and singing to songs

that no one really wrote

 

And I

Whispered a word in the dark

We could meet tonight

 

Oh siren

i don't get you

why do you think

we shouldn't meet right after school

And you leave again?

I can do what you wish

i can act as a man

 

And I

Don't want to let this die

Some people grow up fast

 

 

 

You know those stories where little boy and little girl are friends, then the girl leaves and when she returns she's grown up and thinks the boy is so childish, so the relationship is over? this is about it. so sad, i think.

well you know girls think of themselves as 'grownups'

well yes, it's always the girl and not the boy in this kind of stories. but there's some truth in the fact that girls grow up earlier than boys. don't you think?

well yes, it's always the girl and not the boy in this kind of stories. but there's some truth in the fact that girls grow up earlier than boys. don't you think?

 

Everybody knows that.. girls mature faster.. it is kinda sad :(

 

strawberry, I thought you were a girl..

why? am i that girlish? :uhoh:

 

i'm ed, you were.... vivi? :thinking: i don't remember..

Hi, I would be interested in posting some of my poetry and lyrics on this thread, but nobody takes anything right? It belongs to the poster? :)

why? am i that girlish? :uhoh:

 

i'm ed, you were.... vivi? :thinking: i don't remember..

 

no no no You are not girly.. I just thought you were because of strawberry.. :shy:

 

 

Hello Ed..nice to meet you.. I'm Viri not Vivi..close....very close.:)

Okay let's write something......

 

Hmmmm

:thinking2:

 

 

Untitled:

 

 

As loneliness comes

& I drown

on your empty words

tell me

where have you gone?

 

because after so long

you are still so clear

in the mist of all...

 

as loneliness comes

it brings my fear

and I search for you

in every gaze

 

because in every gaze

in every touch

I long for you

Tell me

when will it stop?

 

As it comes

crawling back

deeper

once more

there's nothing more

I can do..

 

 

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okay that sucked! :sick2: I just wrote it..

Hi, I would be interested in posting some of my poetry and lyrics on this thread, but nobody takes anything right? It belongs to the poster? :)

 

of course! we're very nice here haha :nice:

feel free to post everything you come up with!;)

 

no no no You are not girly.. I just thought you were because of strawberry.. :shy:

 

 

Hello Ed..nice to meet you.. I'm Viri not Vivi..close....very close.:)

 

:uhoh: almost!

nice to meet you too :nice:

 

Okay let's write something......

 

Hmmmm

:thinking2:

 

 

Untitled:

 

 

As loneliness comes

& I drown

on your empty words

tell me

where have you gone?

 

because after so long

you are still so clear

in the mist of all...

 

as loneliness comes

it brings my fear

and I search for you

in every gaze

 

because in every gaze

in every touch

I long for you

Tell me

when will it stop?

 

As it comes

crawling back

deeper

once more

there's nothing more

I can do..

 

 

------

 

okay that sucked! :sick2: I just wrote it..

 

oh i like it, specially the first three paragraphs, full of emotion and very descriptive. sometimes things come up without even wanting to write..:thinking:

okay, well here is my first one.

it's a couple of years old, and it's about re-finding a lost love.

 

A Full Circle

 

I never thought that two

Could feel the same as one

Every time I see you

It’s like the rising sun

 

You entice me with warmth

And a tingling of love

 

This feeling has been there

For time that has stood still

Without you, I am ill

Medicine to heal my wounds

 

I want something

That’s never been had before

And you give

Needing something

That’s never been given before

 

Things have been a full circle

Going back to the start

I’d hold you in my arms

If you’d give me your heart

 

A full circle of feelings

Re-invented beginnings

A full circle of feelings

Its my love that you’re stealing

i really liked it william :)

 

good one viri, as edu said, sometimes good poems come when you don't plan them really :)

 

about your question william:

i think as we did an album for which benefit was for charity (check coldplaying charity club sub-forum), it would be nice to make a book containing the poems/lyrics posted on this thread :) is just an idea i had some months ago.

i really liked it william :)

 

about your question william:

i think as we did an album for which benefit was for charity (check coldplaying charity club sub-forum), it would be nice to make a book containing the poems/lyrics posted on this thread :) is just an idea i had some months ago.

 

Hey, I'm glad you liked it.

 

I have plenty more that I can post. maybe one a day or something.

I have 100+ song lyrics too, that's something I hold dear to me. Some are good, but a lot are just rubbish!

 

And that's a good idea, if you go through with it, let me know because I'm in, it's technically getting published, so why not?

Hey, I'm glad you liked it.

 

I have plenty more that I can post. maybe one a day or something.

I have 100+ song lyrics too, that's something I hold dear to me. Some are good, but a lot are just rubbish!

 

And that's a good idea, if you go through with it, let me know because I'm in, it's technically getting published, so why not?

you are welcome, and thanks a lot for finally sharing. :)

 

wow you are so devoted, that's great. :D since how long have you been writing poetry/lyrics? you write other genres (plays, essays, novels..?), have you musicalized your lyrics?

oh well i'm sure most them are good.

 

i'll study that for the next months, i think a digital release will be easier than a printed one, well is just an idea. :)

you are welcome, and thanks a lot for finally sharing. :)

 

wow you are so devoted, that's great. :D since how long have you been writing poetry/lyrics? you write other genres (plays, essays, novels..?), have you musicalized your lyrics?

oh well i'm sure most them are good.

 

i'll study that for the next months, i think a digital release will be easier than a printed one, well is just an idea. :)

 

I'm glad that I can share here! :)

 

and I've been writing since the 8th grade, so 5/6 years now.

I am working on a novel at the moment, but that's something I can't rush because I really want it to be special, it's been in the works for a while, but now I'm restarting and making it great!

Lots of writers here :D

 

Thanks guys! I just didn't like it...

 

hmmm..

:thinking2:

Lots of writers here :D

 

Thanks guys! I just didn't like it...

 

hmmm..

:thinking2:

 

what didn't you like?

I'm glad that I can share here! :)

 

and I've been writing since the 8th grade, so 5/6 years now.

I am working on a novel at the moment, but that's something I can't rush because I really want it to be special, it's been in the works for a while, but now I'm restarting and making it great!

and we are thanked for that :)

 

so long time. :D

oh i'm sure it'll be great, don't worry too much in going through those periods of working on it and leave it for some time. :) work on it when you feel good is better than rush yourself to finish it soon.

and we are thanked for that :)

 

so long time. :D

oh i'm sure it'll be great, don't worry too much in going through those periods of working on it and leave it for some time. :) work on it when you feel good is better than rush yourself to finish it soon.

 

Oh i know, i know.

 

I started 2 years ago and got 7 chapters complete, at decent length, however i re-read them after a long 2 year hiatus of not writing, I just wasn't motivated and then I decided to develop more story and content and re-write it.

 

I'm happy with my first chapter and I'm slowly working on the second, I've planned 15 chapters for part 1 of the book, there is part 2 which i will develop once the first is completed! :)

what didn't you like?

 

 

Hmm I'm not sure.. I didn't like the 3rd part and it ends abruptly..

well sorry to disappoint you, but one dissatisfied reader is not going to stop me.