lovely :nice:

:blush: thanks a lot sis, it´s this one i was talking about yesterday :thumbsup:

Oh yes, I remember :cool: I love your poems :P

Oh yes' date=' I remember :cool: I love your poems :P[/quote']

:blush: thanks a lot...this one is about creation. i mean inspiration, muses.. :cool:

:cool: I see. It's a very comforting poem :)

:cool: I see. It's a very comforting poem :)

Yes it is. ;)

 

I thought to send the last ones to eoi mag too, but i think is better wait their answer about the first ones... :)

Yeah that's probably wise :) I hope they like them :cool:

Broken keys

oh that's deeply sad friend

your tears can't be stopped

even you wonder yourself why?

 

You look around

the key is broken

you lose your way

you get there too late

 

Now the door is closed

and you can't escape

walls are thinner, now

you can see throught them

 

Walls that are made by you

brick by brick you built it

and you noticied now

that the key is broken

 

you can't escape, now

from your own castle

the wind will broke it

you can't broke it yet

 

your tears seems rivers

rivers of sadness

your tears won`t stop

'cause your key is broken

 

you tried to open the door

and it's still close, dear

time is ending, friend

walls are nearer, be quiet

 

a bird is singing

it brings a note

it says how to escape

from your own castle

 

was written by your friend

the guy you used to love

he wrote it been child

he used to make you smile

 

oh dear there´s a ladder

go out trought the window

oh friend be quiet, sad is going out

the bricks of you castle, must to broke

 

oh dear there´s a piano

one made by your friend

it´s on the sand, dear

the sand you use for your castle

 

you play it keys

and it gives you a tune

the best sounds are coming

birds are singing, dear

 

it make you smile, now

your castle wall's are down

oh dear you stopped to cry

 

an eagle look at you

it gave you a key

oh friend a new way

just follow the new path

 

don`t worry now, mate

don`t ask for a map

'cause the birds and wind

will show you the right one.

 

Memories and joy

will make you smile

wind and music, your friends

will be beside you always.

 

Ariadna Squire Damique

(24/01/05 Monday)

:)

Yeah that's probably wise :) I hope they like them :cool:

I hope it too. ;) well must like it to my teacher, he said me he have my poems.. :) seems he likes music and poetry so i hope he likes them and publish them :)

:stunned: :blush: I think that's my favourite one

this line sounds like it should be in a song...I can't explain why

"your tears won`t stop

'cause your key is broken "

:blush: yeah last ones i`m trying that they sound more as lyrics so they can be sing. :D

 

i think i'm improving day by day ( i think that listen english music most of the day helps) but i know i must learn a lot yet. ;) i'm just a beginner yet. :)

Well they sound good to me :cool:

Well they sound good to me :cool:

:blush: thanks a lot fifi.

You're very welcome ;)

I've got to go now ari but keep up the writing :P :cool:

You're very welcome ;)

I've got to go now ari but keep up the writing :P :cool:

^same here sis :kiss:

sweet dreams, see ya soon

I'll keep writing everyday in my life 'cause writing is the air i breath, the blood that makes beat my heart. ;)

Outside

Be quiet on your steps

be careful on your words

be calm on your feels

 

friend, cheer your joy

it's a nice noon out here

be ready to see the beauty

be glad to see the noon

 

noone will see it too

nomore you'll see it

only once, only once

 

don't mind the cold outside

your heart keep warm

looking the beauty noon

listen the wind melodies

 

no worries on your mind

just sit and listen the trees

just sit and feel the sand

just feel you free, friend

 

no matter what will happen

world has stop for you, now

things are better than they used to be

problem can be fixed, no problems

 

Oh dear just lye and dream

dream looking the sky

dream feeling the sand

dream feeling the sea.

 

There's no matter outside

your heart still be warm

even if the world is freezing

you'll cheer your joy

 

a beautiful noon is beside you

a wonderful nature is waiting you

an amazing melody told you

how to be glad, throw the trees

 

look on your side, friend

from your magic mirror

look the reallity, that you see

and remember on your pillow

 

so friend be glad of it

just sit and dream, once

just sit and close your eyes

no troubles are there now.

 

Ariadna Squire Damique

(26/01/05 Wednesday)

poema encantador :)

:blush: muchas gracias fifi. :kiss:

usted es agradable :idea2: :P

oh fi :P

 

ari, :stunned: keep writing girl! wow :wink:

usted es agradable :idea2: :P

tu tambien fifi. :thumbsup:

oh fi :P

 

ari, :stunned: keep writing girl! wow :wink:

:blush: you like them eva? Thanks sis :kiss: i'll keep writing, i must still improve it. :thumbsup: and anyways if any day i'll stop writing in english i'll keep in spanish. :cool:

*major bump* :D

thanks bro... i didn't write any new poem.. my inspiration went to novels...

that's good too! If u write another sweet poem just let me know :D

be sure i'll told you bro :kiss:

 

i don't know if i posted it here or not... but my eng teacher told me i must one poems (from all i sent to eoi mag) and i choose "gamve over", "no time", "tears" and another that is before tears i think.

 

told him i have more new poems (like the double i sent them) and he said me i must choose bewteen which i sent. :)