Song that i made - like some feedback

[dms120]

So guys, in the last two days i made this song and i will love some feedback from you.

 

I record with a camera, i'm poor is the only way! :laugh3:

 

It doesn't have a name yet, i'm open to suggestions.

 

[ame=http://soundcloud.com/dms120/untitled]Untitled by dms120 on SoundCloud - Create, record and share your sounds for free[/ame]

 

Lyrics (have some errors i'm not english)

 

She came in silence she didn't warned me

 

She even knocked on the door she still has our key

 

she said almost nothing but more than what she had to say

 

she said everything everything I wanted to hear today

 

 

she does not like this talk She doesn´t even like words

 

but she will do everything to go back at what we were before

 

 

oh oh oh

 

 

we remain silent, looking for each other's eyes

 

we were both thinking in all the lies and cries

 

She slowly came to me, that's why she's here

 

i know that she's all i want, for me that's clear.

 

 

She doesn't like this talk She is bad with words

 

but she will not do the same mistakes she done before

 

 

So here's some advice to be happy in this world

 

you can't let your pride be stronger than your love

[lifeincoldplaycolor]

world class quality song

[dms120]

Oh thanks, really!

[Alien Radio]

you can't let your pride be stronger than your love

- I like this.

[dms120]

- I like this.

 

That's the message that the story of the song has.

 

Thanks :)

[dms120]

I still need a name for this! :D

 

Nobody can help me on that?

[Coeurli]

I like it very much :awesome:

 

A title ? :thinking:

 

 

 

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:thinking:

 

 

 

I have no idea :confused:

[dms120]

I really have no idea... e dont want a name with clichés or too much used... but that's hard :thinking:

 

I dont know bahh maybe "Second chance" "Words are Useless" "Talking with actions" "Love must be above your pride" but all sound bad -.-

 

And a song with a name untitled is mainstram too :D

[Coeurli]

"This talk" ? "The talk" ? "Bad with words ?"....nah

 

Something related to silence ?

[dms120]

I guess i like "The talk" has a strong cliche, anyone in this forum know :D that but i like... but i rellly cant decide.

 

It doesnt have to be related with silence... it can be a title that is not related with the lirycs... like viva la vida you know :)

[Batman]

That song sounds fantastic :cheesy:

 

 

Okay so I listened to it 5 times, and just let the melody influence my choice of songtitles:

 

empty words

 

open windows

 

silent sun

 

the dragonfly

 

silly mistakes

 

 

I could go on forever :lol:

 

*replayes the song again*

[dms120]

Thanks thanks :)

 

I laugh with the dragonfly, i dont know the mean in portuguese, now i know :D

 

empty words doesnt make a lot of sence in this song i guess, silly mistakes i kinda like that one.

 

 

Thanks, I'm enjoying the suggestions :P

[Batman]

Thanks thanks :)

 

I laugh with the dragonfly, i dont know the mean in portuguese, now i know :D

 

empty words doesnt make a lot of sence in this song i guess, silly mistakes i kinda like that one.

 

 

Thanks, I'm enjoying the suggestions :P

I'm just picking up what's flying around in my head :laugh3:

 

Oh and the German word for dragonfly is Libelle :awesome:

[dms120]

in portuguese is libélula, is similar :lol:

 

I really cant decide because i really like this one, i guess is best song i made so i want a good name! :D

[Batman]

in portuguese is libélula, is similar :lol:

 

I really cant decide because i really like this one, i guess is best song i made so i want a good name! :D

Oh cool! :lol:

 

 

I can understand, I would have wanted a great name in your situation as well :nod:

[Batman]

And sorry, I can't think of anything else, it's too late now for my brain to work properly :dead:

[dms120]

That's hard... "Our last chance", "she finally came"... too many options fuuu

 

 

I have another song recorded...

 

has a strange name, i even know if is correct or exist... in portuguese it makes sense :lol:

 

[ame=http://soundcloud.com/dms120/heartbreaker-broken-heart]Heartbreaker Broken Heart by dms120 on SoundCloud - Create, record and share your sounds for free[/ame]

[Batman]

Okay so I tried finding some titles again:

 

closed doors

 

what's worse?

 

mine is yours

 

the past is the present

 

locked

 

now it's time

 

wise madness

 

wrong turns

[dms120]

Thanks for not quit this :laugh3:

 

Some make sense others not... i love wise madness, it's an awesome name really but not for this song. But that name deserves a song not kiding xD

 

now it's time fits but i dont think is the one.

 

I just think in a name when i came to the forum xD I was thinking in a name that shows that the "she" of the song loses his pride and try to fix the things do you see? or she yield to love(i dont know the correct words :\ )

 

 

I know I'm being boring, sorry, and thanks for the help :P

[Comuris]

Its good i really like the second song but which music you would like make. so i can give you a little bit advice. I think it will be better if you have band, because if you don't your making music like Ed Sheeran ( not that its bad artist ) i don't know if you want that

[dms120]

Sorry, i dont understand what you said... your english is worse than mine :D

 

Are you saying that is better i just write songs? If is that i agree with you, i'm a bad guitarist and even worse singer xD

[Prospector]

Cute song :D, ok, let's think of names:

Silent Room

Nothing Left To Say

Back In Silence

Silent Noise

Silence

Peace treaty

Getting Over Pride

 

Whatever, nice song :D

[Spider-Man]

Great songs! Trying to think of a title? Let me try and help! :laugh3:

 

Quiet Riot

World's End

Calm Before The Storm

[dms120]

Thanks for the names, but i already have one, i name it Unexpected. It's not that great but it fits :D