Hi everyone, not sure if you will be interested, but I'd love to read things people have written, it could be about anything.. I hope I've created this thread in the right spot lol..

 

here's one that I wrote, I'd love to hear anything you guys have written.

 

As I sit here wondering where it all went wrong,

I can’t help but feel there’s nowhere I belong.

At times you seem alien as if speaking in tongue,

I wait for the day where the truth is sung.

 

Days of blissful ignorance when I was young,

Are now no more than a memory, as I face the next rung,

This mighty ladder it seems has no end,

But upwards I feel I must transcend.

The top bears gifts greater than silver and gold,

For the liberation of the mind cannot be sold.

 

The puzzle is fragmented like the love of humankind,

It’s hard to see the picture when you’re nothing short of blind.

What would it take to heal all these people?

So they connect together like a flower and sepal?

 

No truer words have been spoken under the sun,

Than the answer to it all, that we are all simply one...

I've written something but I need someone who will help me to translate in English from the Italian.

 

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ok, post it and I'll translate it using google translate.

I've written a bunch of songs, but the one dearest to me is a song I wrote when I dog passed away. Maybe the context is corny, but I get emotional when performing it.

 

"Carry You"

 

And when your eyes full of life

Became eyes that were lifeless

I cried more than an angel falling

It was my life just stalling

 

Yeah, I know life doesn’t turn around

But I’d hate for something like a rebound

To take my frightened state away

 

I deserve to be scared about life without you

I knew you since the pregnancy was due

And I’ve always loved you, even if I tortured you

Even if, now, you make me so blue

 

I want you to chase it into heaven

Even if makes me even more frightened

I’ll carry you there, I swear

I’ll carry you there, I swear

I’ll kiss you away before you are taken

I’ll kiss you goodbye if you are taken

 

Something I believe is right, is just so wrong

To see a life in a body

Run away, and then a lifeless body

I tried not to cry for everybody

And then, waterfalls for everybody

 

Turn around, no don’t do it

If everyone turned on you, you wouldn’t like it

This is it, this is the end

For you my friend,

I loved you to the end

 

I want you to chase it into heaven

Even if makes me even more frightened

I’ll carry you there, I swear

I’ll carry you there, I swear

I’ll kiss you away before you are taken

I’ll kiss you goodbye if you are taken

 

And your white old eyes see nothing anymore

What does life mean to you anymore?

And they show me to the door

Just before they took my heart and tore

That's a very sad and heartfelt song. You obviously really loved your dog, I've got a lot of respect for that. In my opinion, you did a very good job lyrically too. keep up the good work! :)

I wrote it a year ago, so lyrically, it's pretty simple. But its really heartfelt. I'll probably post some of my other stuff sometime.

I can't write poems / songs at all lol. That was simple (in a good way) and heartfelt for sure! And very touching tbh. Keep up the great work man! :lol:

Here's one more I'll share since I have it available on my laptop. It's a bit different, but its supposed to be abstract so yeah. Those are two I actually perform, plus one other but I don't have that one on me so yeah.

 

"Soldier Boy and a Little Girl"

 

You cut me down

And left me all around the room

Let’s assume

you gotta move it

So prove it

 

So let me go

Alone, in a place of stone

Set it up

And hold yourself down

Hold onto to the ground

 

Hey, how are ya dear

Do you have the cure

For a broken heart

C’mon, take me apart

Hey, control yourself

Don’t ever let go

Do you hear the echo

Rectified, and then stolen

 

Breathing heavy

Holding it steady

Because I’m ready for whatever you need

But baby, you’re too hard to please

 

Ruled you, getting down

Took you from the floor

To the moon, so don’t assume

I gotcha now

When I let ya down

Hold on to the ceiling

 

Hey, how are ya dear

Do you have the cure

For a broken heart

C’mon, take me apart

Hey, control yourself

Don’t ever let go

Do you hear the echo

Rectified, and then stolen

 

Soldier boy

A little girl

A pond of empathy

A world of mystery

here's one I wrote a while ago, let me know what you think..

 

Insanity thrives in a world designed by order,

We are connected by a web yet separated by a border.

A species which builds nations by the architecture of the hand,

Have fallen much shorter of the grandiose plan.

Sin and hate fill a land of light and beauty,

Corruption breeds war and we stand aside, neglect of duty.

We have come so far, but in many ways stayed the same.

In this world of calamity and fame, who in this mess is to blame?

Was it Adam who took that ever so crucial bite of an apple,

That triggered a series of events that would lead some to a chapel?

It seems as though in a world full of so much confusion,

We are yet to get answers and finally have a conclusion.

Even so, and given all this, the feeling of an end is in sight,

And maybe one day soon this world of darkness will be bright.

Freedom is what's at stake, and each person deserves to know what it is to be.

As someone famous once said, "the truth shall set you free"

All this aside, these are just the thoughts of me.

Man, that's beautiful. Both of your poems I've thoroughly enjoyed and normally I don't like poems. Seriously they're awesome! And i find myself thinking many of the same thoughts

I try my hand at writing songs but it's really the beginning stages to be honest so here we go!

 

"Were getting lost in space

feel like weve got no place

Me and you were floating through

floating through the galaxy

 

Warning lights go off saying

Houston we've got a problem

because im still falling

falling for you

 

Going through orbit

landing on mars

I still feel so far

Still feel so far from you..."

 

This is my first "Song" I wrote. It's still at the very beginning my next is my second one

 

"Sitting across the bench

thats when our eyes meet

thats when my heart beats

 

Sitting across the room

It feels like just me and you

This place is empty

When your all I see

 

When your in my head

my heart moves fast

when your in my reach

My lips freeze"

 

They are pretty shit but it's just being able to have something makes me feel happy, I still need to think of some chords or something but its a start!

I try my hand at writing songs but it's really the beginning stages to be honest so here we go!

 

"Were getting lost in space

feel like weve got no place

Me and you were floating through

floating through the galaxy

 

Warning lights go off saying

Houston we've got a problem

because im still falling

falling for you

 

Going through orbit

landing on mars

I still feel so far

Still feel so far from you..."

 

This is my first "Song" I wrote. It's still at the very beginning my next is my second one

 

"Sitting across the bench

thats when our eyes meet

thats when my heart beats

 

Sitting across the room

It feels like just me and you

This place is empty

When your all I see

 

When your in my head

my heart moves fast

when your in my reach

My lips freeze"

 

They are pretty shit but it's just being able to have something makes me feel happy, I still need to think of some chords or something but its a start!

thanks man, glad you enjoyed them. I felt like I needed to share them somewhere and figured this is as good as a place as any lol. here's one more I wrote..

 

"DREAMS"

Life’s a dream made manifest in the mind,

Movies produced and directed, perfectly timed,

Dreaming within a dream did I indeed find,

That reality and truth, hasn’t always shined.

 

This dream I was in was full of delusions,

A prison of my own doing, full of illusions,

One term for the experience could be psychosis,

Where it would lead me, was questioning osmosis.

 

Like Daniel in a lion’s den was I thrown,

For what seemed to me, something to be shown,

This place of disgrace showed in this one man’s face,

That could only be defeated by speaking with grace.

 

What’s truly real except what we believe?

Do our senses tell truth or in fact deceive?

Everything you perceive is inside your head,

From when you’re awake at day, to asleep in bed.

 

We all have our own dreams and make our reality,

Question our existence and our own mortality,

The truth is a weapon when people gain morality,

This illusory dream creates a separatist mentality.

 

We are dreams inside a dream, the observer being observed,

We are beings created with the purpose of life being conserved,

Awaken in the dream; the truth sets you free,

If we all manage to, heaven is where you’ll be.

 

It's basically about my experience in a psychiatric hospital and the "dream" like state of psychosis

That's really good, man. would make an awesome song :)

Right when I read "like daniel in a lions den" I thought UATW

haha yeah it's one of my favourites of mylo xyloto. One of those types of songs I can relate to

haha yeah it's one of my favourites of mylo xyloto. One of those types of songs I can relate to

 

It's personally my favorite!

lol yeah that's understandable, it's an awesome song. I love the lines "Oh morning come bursting the clouds amen, Lift off this blindfold let me see again." and "The tightrope that I'm walking just sways and ties, the devil as he's talking with those angel's eyes, and I just want to be there when the lightening strikes, and the saints go marching in." such good lyrics

lol yeah that's understandable, it's an awesome song. I love the lines "Oh morning come bursting the clouds amen, Lift off this blindfold let me see again." and "The tightrope that I'm walking just sways and ties, the devil as he's talking with those angel's eyes, and I just want to be there when the lightening strikes, and the saints go marching in." such good lyrics

 

Yup its unfortunate that GS doesn't seem to have the same amazing lyrics.

Any tips for a new writer?

Any tips for a new writer?

 

For songs, I like to think about the song's big picture. What message is it trying to say. But I also want to tell a story as well. The hard part is balancing the two together.

Here's a poem I wrote.

 

"You got time"

I could say a word and a rhyme,

I could shoot a tequila with lime,

I could buckle down and tell myself

everything's fine,

I could give up my values, bend a

knee and climb.

So many options ahead

I see myself flying!

But they were lying

Everything is not fine

I have no time.

 

Sorry it's not very optimistic (just how I was feeling at the time).

I agree with that ^ and as Chris noted, some of his songs were written in 10 minutes. It's just about finding the right inspiration and channelling it through yourself onto paper. If you find yourself in a particularly inspired mood, or feeling heavy emotionally, I find that's the best time to write.I'm no professional though, so that's really all the advice I've got, I'm afraid. Good luck ! :)

Thanks everyone! :)

you're right, it's not very optimistic, I sure hope you don't feel that way now. None the less, It's still a great poem. I envisioned a struggle to better oneself and advance in life, but you felt as though time was running out and "time is not on your side", contrary to Chris' lyrics lol.. I hope these days you are flying!