Best u Can Posted January 14, 2007 Author Share Posted January 14, 2007 aw, well that's good :) I won't pry into your personal life by asking questions, but don't feel bad to open up because I would like to pretend that I'm not trying to pry into your life and do it anyway :uhoh: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyuu Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Now you are rambling. :laugh4: Not to mention ; I always loved your poems though. :uhoh: No that's okey, you don't have to know everything of my past but if you have questions, feel free to ask! :) Latest poem, inspired by the deadline ; exams! Peu Important Everything feels heavy Everything's on my shoulders Without my shoulders to cry on I got worries on my own Being there for you 'You're being here for me' Now that I ask for you There's no one on the surface of the sea Things happened Time has passed I don't know where my road goes Nor ends Time drives too fast Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Best u Can Posted January 14, 2007 Author Share Posted January 14, 2007 post 666 :devil: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lovelight Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Elsje that's really nice !!! :nice: Ok, I'm not a good poet, but this is just a try :rolleyes: The World I could show you the world We could live on our own But you still wouldn't know If you wanted more Just of seeing your face I could hardly guess You don't want me to be In this beautiful sea It's the sea where we drown When we don't even try And it's the sea where we swim When we believe we can. So now tell me, what will I do? If I can't even swim or drown with you What will become of me? Just don't tell me I'll be far away from you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Byron369 Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Wow, lovelight...It's nice :thumbsup: Anyways, what's your real name? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ms Magpie Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 great poems, everyone! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ColdMike Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Lovelight, it's a nice try! really nice! Keep on writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lovelight Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Thanks guys! :D btw, my name is Carolina. I really liked your poems too.. so keep on posting new ones ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyuu Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Actually Carol, I think the poem is nice bit a but simple, I'm sure you can do much better though! Keep the poems coming! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lovelight Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Thanks Elsje! :) .. I'm not good at poems, but I'll keep on trying . :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Byron369 Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Well, Carolina...keep up the good work :wink: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyuu Posted January 16, 2007 Share Posted January 16, 2007 Wow, I really like that one thinker! :) You're in a band right? Anywayz, new poem. It took me a lot of time to make this one, it had to be close to perfection. This is a poem about someone that's far away from me but still very close. Important person. So Mike, tribute to you. This is not the greatest poem in the world no, this is a tribute (to you). :P Brother Sunshine raised Clouds burst Common points created a mirror A mirror where you could see You equals me Same passion for creativity Similar past Never give up your dreams, dear Time will make them last You're an unwritten bestseller Your burden's trying to stop your ink from flowing Someday, they have to let you go Whenever, wherever, you're going! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Li_cold Posted January 16, 2007 Share Posted January 16, 2007 Guys, your poems are so nice that I wanna write myself! :nice: Congratulations you all! :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ColdMike Posted January 16, 2007 Share Posted January 16, 2007 Wow, I really like that one thinker! :) You're in a band right? Anywayz, new poem. It took me a lot of time to make this one, it had to be close to perfection. This is a poem about someone that's far away from me but still very close. Important person. So Mike, tribute to you. This is not the greatest poem in the world no, this is a tribute (to you). :P Brother Sunshine raised Clouds burst Common points created a mirror A mirror where you could see You equals me Same passion for creativity Similar past Never give up your dreams, dear Time will make them last You're an unwritten bestseller Your burden's trying to stop your ink from flowing Someday, they have to let you go Whenever, wherever, you're going! :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: Elsje, that's wow, reallly good, I love it! :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Byron369 Posted January 16, 2007 Share Posted January 16, 2007 :nice: I like it, Elsje Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lovelight Posted January 17, 2007 Share Posted January 17, 2007 Great poems everyone !!! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miss-Clementine Posted January 17, 2007 Share Posted January 17, 2007 Elsje, your poetry is beautiful, I have nothing else to say, no other word to describe it. I've never really been on this thread before, probably my first time here, but wow your poems just leave me speechless, you seriously have talent! Good job :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyuu Posted January 17, 2007 Share Posted January 17, 2007 Elsje' date=' your poetry is beautiful, I have nothing else to say, no other word to describe it. I've never really been on this thread before, probably my first time here, but wow your poems just leave me speechless, you seriously have talent! Good job :)[/quote'] :blush: Thanks a lot! Seriously! :D :stunned: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ColdMike Posted January 18, 2007 Share Posted January 18, 2007 I wrote that last one yesterday... It's about love (awww... love... what a nice thing to write about ) It's called Upside Down For you, I'll travel, ignoring the distance, I know, honey, you are my chance, My lovely and warm spark. I'll climb the highest mountains, To be with you, licking your pains, Hearing your words burning my heart. Under cold and white stars, that sky like ink Under the frozen and pale moon who winks Your body is like a beautiful and calm sea, I hear regular rythms coming to my ears, These waves on your skin, the tides of shivers, Let me feel them, let them travelling to me, forever. When I think of you, it snows while the sun shines, All around the world seems to turn upside down, You are the daylight, coming to scare the night And you are the one who caught my sight, My deep and warm feelings, my lonely heart. Let's live our love, let's be together, apart. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Byron369 Posted January 18, 2007 Share Posted January 18, 2007 I love it, Mike :happy: /I was just reading some of yours older poems...and :stunned: Hmm...I should post here a poem...it's been a while. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ColdMike Posted January 19, 2007 Share Posted January 19, 2007 What do you mean by :stunned:? lol Well, another one, made yesterday... Called My own Shadow. Those loud voices in my head Are screaming at me, are driving me mad, Are telling me I'm mistaking, That I didn'g get anything. Trying to fight this, my head, my heart, Both don't need that useless war. That part of me, that part I'd like to erase, stays, I always try to chase it away. They are back, they are the doubts Whoever I am, whatever I do They would never let me go They're such my own shadow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Best u Can Posted January 27, 2007 Author Share Posted January 27, 2007 ok, this is super hard to do.. (dream) -My girlfriend and I ended up de-building graves -debating, while we were wondering whether the war would end up being good and what would be won -general patton sang a gay song so he was sure where we were -carelessly mixing and draining concoctions in a kitchen sink she carried along past the pathway I took to the house -she explained that the gay song was the last straw -so she told me, in not very long a nuclear bomb will explode -because the concoctions react to water, way far away down the drain -then through the glass I saw two big blasts -I turned to get away but the radiation vaporized tires on our car and my girlfriend and I were being arrested I tried to make something that was semi-rhythmical or full of alliteration for my stupid happy joyful poetry class which is full of lollipops and buttons.. and I realized it's really. really hard, at least to write a long poem that has a lot of alliteration in it. we were supposed to record a dream, which is easy. I already recorded the dream and wrote it in a sort of poetry form, but making it sound interesting is hard. We have to read this out loud and it's not allowed to rhyme, so I'm having mucho trouble adding rhyme in places other than the end of lines and a little alliteration, etc. here's what I wrote before as a record of the dream: (dream) My girlfriend and I were slaves destroying old war graves, so they could be recycled it was our job a military general sang the name and number of the grave we worked on and we were to reply so that he knew where we were it was kind of a gay song she was digging from the inside of her grave we were talking, but then I couldn't see her, so then I got the hammer and just started pounding on random graves to crack them all as I walked along a path, the wall of graves became pictures which made them more enjoyable to smash. I got too excited then we had a break, my girlfriend walked past me, deeper she went inside a house, pouring some concoctions down the kitchen sink she said it was two nuclear bombs, and she was tired of the digging. as soon as the water reached her concoctions, a few miles away the bombs would explode. she poured too fast, I couldn't stop to ask, "what?" a second later, two cars/cities exploded I turned around and tried to find a getaway for us because of the radiation it was dangerous but finally, I would live with her, and we would run from the governments but then I turned around and the rubber tires on our car melted from the radiation, and... I turned around again and she was being arrested, we were surrounded Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
janhaw Posted January 28, 2007 Share Posted January 28, 2007 Like a dream behind the wall, my voice dies without the sound. In my eyes a strange death lives, nobody knows why. My hands are still on the ground. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Byron369 Posted January 28, 2007 Share Posted January 28, 2007 Oh, Jan, svida mi se :nice: "Jednostavna" a tako "nejednostavna" :D Tuzna...ali super My turn :P MAN ON THE SURFACE Long fingers, Maybe 'cause of it. Sad eyes, Maybe 'cause of it. Arm hairs, Maybe 'cause of it. Wounds on the face, Maybe 'cause of it. Ugly smile, Maybe 'cause of it. Unnecessary words, Maybe 'cause of it. Incorrigible future, Maybe 'cause of it. And maybe 'cause of the handwriting Maybe 'cause of selflessness Maybe 'cause of hermetism, Insensitivity, Insecurity, Inadequacy, Impossibility, Maybe 'cause of complexity. Short hair Circle-size Maybe 'cause of it. I am restrained. Maybe 'cause of it I hate Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyuu Posted January 28, 2007 Share Posted January 28, 2007 Like a dream behind the wall, my voice dies without the sound. In my eyes a strange death lives, nobody knows why. My hands are still on the ground. :stunned: Stunning! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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