You still have great raw talent for writing Ari :)

thanks a lot aaron. :) i would like i can post here some of the short stories or plays i wrote but all them are in spanish so i must translate them previously :/

Don't worry about that Ari. :)

Translations sometimes fiddle with the words and order.

may be but some times is not easy.. sometimes i lose the main sense and others it even lose the rhyme (is is a poem). :/

"if i cry alone today

everybody will think i'm fool

i don't mind about it now "

 

I loved that line, there was a time i could relate to that one.. its so beautiful beita ..hope to read more of your poems soon :kiss:

nice poem Ari but so sad :cry:

 

I should read the others some day... :)

"if i cry alone today

everybody will think i'm fool

i don't mind about it now "

 

I loved that line, there was a time i could relate to that one.. its so beautiful beita ..hope to read more of your poems soon :kiss:

 

aww ren i know, i'm glad that you read them ren :kiss:

 

nice poem Ari but so sad :cry:

 

I should read the others some day... :)

 

I know is a sad one, but none all of my poems are sad, i was re-reading the first ones i posted here and aren't that sad :)

 

feel free to read them. ;)

aww ren i know, i'm glad that you read them ren

But of course, i luff them! :heart:

I'm looking forward for a new one :kiss:

there will be a new one soon i think :D

wooo hooo!!

I cant wait to read it :nice:

Oh Ari, I always use the word beautiful when reading your work, but they really truly are. They keep getting better, too. Great work. :)

thanks a lot pai :blush: :kiss: yours very nice too. :cool: :thumbsup:

Wow just found this thread! Poetry the food of the soul.

 

I really like Leaf on the Forest :)

thanks a lot kekita :kiss:

i re-read my own poems that i posted here some days ago and

 

leaf on the forest is one of my faves one.. i guess somebody can have her/his own faves works? :uhoh:

of course!

 

yay i like the authors fav :D

:D yesterday two poems come up :surprised: more or less at the same time... that was when i was re-watching live 8 concert :o, here on the telly at 3 am there's a short programme that show the concerts again, but just like 6 or 8 songs a day because is a 90 mins programme :/

Your eyes

 

You woke up too early today

you wish it was a dream

but your eyes are red

and your face is covered by tears

 

someone asked you

are you right honey

you seem tired this morning

you said everything's right

 

you know it wasn't true

but that the best you can do

you think, but that's wrong

it won't help you

 

you wish it were true again

but obviously you are wrong

you don't recognize we made a mistake

i know the truth hurts

but lies hurts many more

that's why your eyes are sad

 

you lied your friends everyday

saying everthings was right

there was no problem in your life

but there are some that you don't know

 

the onces you can fix alone

you think you are too old

to ask for any help

you thought you can fix it

 

but some other came behind this one

someone said he loves you

and his words weren't right honey

you know it, when is too late

 

you wish it were true again

but obviously you are wrong

you don't recognize we made a mistake

i know the truth hurts

but lies hurts many more

that's why your eyes are sad

 

what you can do today?

just hide on your room

and cry, nothing more you think

there's nothing i can do now

 

never is too late honey

tell me the truth friend

i'll help you the best i can

tell me what happened

 

you though you were strong

but you aren't, none is enough strong

to go on alone with all his troubles

both us can find how to fix it

 

you wish it were true again

but obviously you are wrong

you don't recognize we made a mistake

i know the truth hurts

but lies hurts many more

that's why your eyes are sad

 

no more tears now

let's we find an answer

for your trouble friend

 

everything will be fixed

no hurts today, you'll feel

if you want i help you and

that'll be gone forever.

 

Ariadna Squire Damique (Wednesday 31/08/2005)

The last 2 poems are amazing! That last poem feels so familiar :(

feels so familiar why? :huh: :(

 

well i tried to find this thread days ago and i couldn't till now.. well ok i'm at uni now so i have less time to write... but an old story that i wrote more or less complety time ago, came up again days ago... :) that's a good thing unless that i guess i'll can't write.. i'll take notes and re-write it when i have more free time.

 

:kiss:

 

anyways i hope i can write poems soon. :)

ari, your poems are so beautiful!I loved all of them!!good job, ari!and thanks for sharing them! ;)

:blush: you are welcome li_cold :kiss: is a pleasure for me to can share them. :)

 

you know that some people don't want to show their works (drawing, paintings, music, writings....) they are too shy.. i was too and sometimes i'm very shy.

thanks a lot for thebestyoucan to find the link to this thread.

 

I've been thinking to quit writing for ever these days ago but i think i must keep writing firstly because i love writing (i thought to quit it because i'm afraid my writings will be darker) and secondly because i want to devote m wiriting to my mum, because i'm sure that she is with me, and i want her to be proud of me wherever she is now.

Ari.....you really should keep writing if you like it much....and if it helps you!

I really thought it won't help me now but oh well i always wanted to be a writer and recently a nice story come up, and i'm writing it slowly... about poems i don't know now... someones come up recently but i didn't wrote them...