grids Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 Oh nooooooooo. So perfect! Hehe, I love your poem Beatriz! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 thanks a lot Afi :nice: Although i'm afraid that this one is a bit depressing but anyways is nice, and it came out so quick and easy :cool4: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
grids Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 Yeah.. Your welcome.. Keep going Beatriz:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 thanks Afi. I will. :) I hope i'll be in a creative mood soon, I miss it, when i was able to write a new poem every day. Keep on yours too Afi. :) You'll improve them by keep writing. Miro told you a good advice too :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Giuly2E Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 ^^ it´s a bit sad but it´s beautiful bea as always:):) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Byron369 Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 A bad day What if when you wake up life makes no sense What if you don't feel as good as you used to be what if air don't seems to help you keep breathing why if you can't hide it your worst nightmares chase you now where to hide what to do? what if your believing are weak now how to deal with a new day smiling? what if you've discovered a truth that nobody sees but you? what if everything seems to be against you, as your worst enemy who to trust if you know for sure that the worst enemies on the light are best friends each night who to talk with, who to trust? what if your life makes no sense what if your believes are broken what it you know today all that was hidden for centuries that life is a fairy tale there are bad and good souls ones against the other and you are in the middle you have noone to talk to and them are chasing you there's nowhere to hide now there's nothing to change it what if you feel that everything is a big fake that all you trusted in is just a child's tale there's nothing we can do just to help each other and wish every night that there will be another day tomorrow 'cause there's nothing we can do we are not powerful enough to make it change just keep smiling and breathing (Ariadna Squire Damique 10/08/2007) It just came out :smug: i wish it were not that depressing but... You should've named it "What if" lol. I love it :nice: And I don't think it's depressive. Becuase smiling and breathing helps us to survive. Good job, Ari :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 thanks miro :blush: yes i thought to change the name but anyways is about a bad day so... :) i wrote directly on the post, i mean i use to handwrite it on a paper firstly to check the mistakes but not this time. :nice: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Byron369 Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 thanks miro :blush: yes i thought to change the name but anyways is about a bad day so... :) i wrote directly on the post, i mean i use to handwrite it on a paper firstly to check the mistakes but not this time. :nice: :surprised: And it went so ... naturally? Wow, cool! The name's good as it is :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 yes when i finished it i was so happy and surprised that i wrote it as it is so easily.. creativity comes like this :) i love it when it comes like that time. :) i was watching the news, listening to placebo and remember some things told me my dad that he found on internet about politics and economy. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Byron369 Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 yes when i finished it i was so happy and surprised that i wrote it as it is so easily.. creativity comes like this :) i love it when it comes like that time. :) i was watching the news, listening to placebo and remember some things told me my dad that he found on internet about politics and economy. :) :) Very nice. I like those moments too. Who doesn't? Anyways - I think it's a day over for me. Going to bed. Need to find a present for my cousin's birthday tomorrow morning. Though I have no idea what to buy. :confused: Good night, everyone! :kiss: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 10, 2007 Share Posted August 10, 2007 ok miro. :) nighty night. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 11, 2007 Share Posted August 11, 2007 Flower Flow Come on here my friend You've reach the top You are on the higher hill You feel the king of your town Take a deep breath Fill your lungs with air Fresh ozone air Feel yourself renew How nice are those days When you came to your countryside Once you called it your garden You keep coming when you feel lonely Come on friend don't be afraid You'll reach the hill again A rock seems to be broken And water cames out from it Like blood on an open hurt Look how the water flows it goes down the mountain Look down the hill Look how it stop to form a lake People used to said that the lake was formed from the tears of a sad princess and now is yours you feel as a kid with his favourite tresure lie down on the grass looking all the flowers flowers form a rainbow round the lake, son of hill see the daisies, poppies and sunflowers take a deep breath, feel it you are dreaming on the grass feel an ant that walks on your hand look up to the sky look how the clouds walk in it a drop touch your head clouds get dark, storm has began you hide on the cave near the lake don't be afraid, it'll be over soon you feel renew as a child so you take some flowers you throw them on the river them flow and flow on the river sometimes fast sometimes slow making a coloured line on the water till they end on the sea (Ariadna Squire Damique 10/08/2007) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
grids Posted August 11, 2007 Share Posted August 11, 2007 Hehehe. Nice poem Beatriz;) lye on the grass looking all the flowers What's lye?:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 11, 2007 Share Posted August 11, 2007 lol i used a wrong verb... i often confuse to lie and to lye... :confused: lie is when you are in a horizon position on a surface... as the verse says... lie down on the grass... lye is when you don't tell the thruth... i hope i'm not mistaken them again.. i hate when i mistaken it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 12, 2007 Share Posted August 12, 2007 lighted night look up to the sky look how the stars shine look the siluetes that it draws look the moon that is full there's no noise around us everything is so silent tonight and the sky is our only watcher look the comets that cross the sky how long are their flames how bright is its light make a wish you wishpered to me i felt your hand holding mine i could picture your smile i wish this night never ends i wish we share it forever i wish the night be ours look up to the sky there's no noise around us look the comets that cross the sky make a wish you wishpered to me i closed my eyes and take a breath and when i open them, slowly you were not there, i was alone just the moon looked at me, from above people call those comets the tears and as they walk on the night sky tears come down from my eyes looking up to the sky as the night, were a mirror that reflect your eyes as just a minute ago your eyes reflected the lights just the moon was the witness of the sweet moment that we lived when i feel your hand touching mine i felt that you wiped my tears but i looked around me and you were not there anymore look at the starts, how the shine i always see than when i close my eyes (Ariadna Squire Damique 12/08/2007) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Giuly2E Posted August 12, 2007 Share Posted August 12, 2007 ^^so nice bea...it begins very closed to yellow:wink3::P:P....but it´s really good:blushed: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 12, 2007 Share Posted August 12, 2007 yes i noticied that.... i was thinking to write it, because tonight is las lagrimas de san lorenzo... that is that at 3am some comets cross the sky each year and people make a wish when them pass.. i thought about that like 3 days ago. :) i think i'll post the second one... althought i'm not sure if its so good.. a bit sad... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 12, 2007 Share Posted August 12, 2007 radar heart here i am lying down on the ground i've been used and now i'm broken i've been tired of waiting for it and i went to a mad day a day where everything paralized time stopped around me i only saw worried sad faces all them crying for me what happened, i don't remember my body is tired, i can't move don't know what happened i don't hear my heart beating i managed to listen to the people they say that it went too fast that i went totally mad for someone that don't deserves me i only was a radar heart i just looked for a bit of love and someone played with my feelings and when he got tired he left me down i shared so nice moments just thinking of him made me smile but now since he's gone i'm here lying on the ground i just looked for a bit of love i just wanted to find my soulmate and i was wrong, and i went crazy he was so good but really a lazy dude he lied me so many times he pretend a life he will never live he just played with my heart my heart used to beat faster but now it hardly moves i can't feel my breathing cause my soul has gone it left me, as he did lying down, as you see i can't move, i can't feel 'cause he broke my heart (Ariadna Squire Damique 12/08/2007) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Giuly2E Posted August 12, 2007 Share Posted August 12, 2007 yes i noticied that.... i was thinking to write it, because tonight is las lagrimas de san lorenzo... that is that at 3am some comets cross the sky each year and people make a wish when them pass.. i thought about that like 3 days ago. :) i think i'll post the second one... althought i'm not sure if its so good.. a bit sad... true!we call it "notte di San Lorenzo"..I saw a comet yesterday night!I can´t believe it!the first time in my life:cheesy::P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 12, 2007 Share Posted August 12, 2007 lol my dad took me to the countryside when i was like 3, to see that event... lol i end up falling asleep on the grass haha... i remember that that day i dreamt that was snowing outside my grandma's house. i saw some comets in my life... once i even saw 3 ovnis crossing the sky of my neigbourhood... :o that scared me :uhoh: that was in two different days... btw radar heart, is pretty inspired on the bitter end by placebo :nice: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 13, 2007 Share Posted August 13, 2007 don't look back why is your face so sad today? why you feel there's nothing good? why your eyes are tired of crying? why you find hard to go on today? you spent your night on the dark looking back at your past you hug the old pics that you took and realised that they are not here anymore there's nothing you could do my friend there's no way to change it today you have to go on without it there's nothing we can do there's no time machine you doubt now if you took the good way, you think you were wrong there's no use to think that you did your best my friend don't think of that any longer it will brake your heart there's no reason to be sad you see how many chances has gone away in front of you you ought to be a good dude and never had a rebel soul seem that rebels are happier seem that all are better than you now but that's not true they feel fine 'cause you don't you realize that they are happy for you? didn't you introduce that couple? didn't you adviced that friend? what's the reason to be sad then? feel proud of yourself that don't deserve a tear you make the life worthy 'cause you made it to happen there's no need to cry there's no need to be sad cheer you up and smile they are happy 'cause of you you made that life had sense you made that days worth living you made it to happen and there's the harder work but why it don't works for you? why you cried all that night? why your sight is so deeply sad this morning? how that can't cheer you up today? what are you looking for? why you keep seeking it alone? how can i help you now, friend? how can i thank you all what you've done? (Ariadna Squire Damique 13/08/2007) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 14, 2007 Share Posted August 14, 2007 care me when you feel deeply sad what do to my dear? when you feel everthing needs a change and you were afraid to choose the right way calm down my dear i'll be there for you i will always be with you every time you need me i hear a whisper, so sweetly that told me that, on the wind take life less seriously although i found everything ironical get ready for the magical night relax looking at the sky look the moon, how it dance on your eyes, so full feel your beating, calmy feel your breath, slowly close your eyes, and think of nothing feel the wind on your skin feel it, how it cares your skin, as it used to how it change your mood, happiness is coming how it make you feel better, as yo needed to its like a hug, the one you need open your eyes again see the world around you look at it with different eyes it seems that your lips smile again that was what you needed but you were afraid to ask for it you were afraid to show it and now you was brave nothing had changed arount you but you feel different now relax, confident, happy 'cause your problem has gone don't stress yourself with that matter don't try to weight the world over your head, on your back throw them away, and smile you were not called for that you can't change it yourself just care for be happy each day may it change it all that way (Ariadna Squire Damique 14/08/2007) It ends a bit more possitive.... although i thought to another so different yesterday... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ColdMike Posted August 14, 2007 Share Posted August 14, 2007 Oh, very nice :nice: I love it. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted August 14, 2007 Share Posted August 14, 2007 Oh, very nice :nice: I love it. :) thanks mike :) does the last one is more possitive than the previous one then? btw that one remember me the old one called, if the wind isn't here. (i look all the ones i've posted here some days ago... more than 40 wow, and i took a year off it last year). i thought to wrote one called beehive yesterday.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ColdMike Posted August 14, 2007 Share Posted August 14, 2007 thanks mike :) does the last one is more possitive than the previous one then? i thought to wrote one called beehive yesterday.. It sounds more positive. It is actually. You ask less questions, as if you've found a solution between the two poems. This is a good sign:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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