Yay a new poem! Did you stop writing for a while? :)

I like it! :cool:

i stopped. :/ but i'm back :D

Shes back baby!

 

I'll read this later. :cool:

thanks a lot reilly. ;)

Beautiful! :cool:

 

Nice poem Ari.

Guilty mind

I've been all this night crying

Nothing can't help me now, to feel better

I feel so down today, i still wonder why

I still heard the walls going down quickly

 

Just for a few hours

i had the world on my hands

I had the chance to change

and i let all go down

 

Nothing can make me smile again

i noticied that since some months ago

nothing was the same

nothing is clear again, all is dark yet

 

I don't know what did i do wrong

what did i do, and all seems so dark

i can recognize anything near me now

my hands can touch only smoke

 

all the figures i knew are going now

nothing is the same since days before

i don't know yet what did i do wrong

how i can fix all again

 

until the machine broke itself

how i'll can escape from those monsters

once and again i crowl againt them

again the crazy see, i was the best surfer

 

i was so high and happy

sitting down a tree

looking how the world was moving

but since some days the wind has stop

 

i wonder why it won't come back anymore

i can't stop crying day and night

nothing can help me now

i lost the chances i had on my hands

 

Just for a few hours

i had the world on my hands

I had the chance to change

and i let all go down

 

Feel free, go away

i said while my eyes beging to cry

i felt my heart beating

but my hands are so cold now

 

nothing will be the same

while i'll be here seeing the leafs moving

nothing will change yet

till i stand up and feel my heart.

 

Ariadna Squire Damique

(24-04-05 Sunday

 

No joke i started crying when i read that because it relates to me so much right now, beautiful Ari!

Same here.My life has become a mess lately..i like the poem :)

thanks a lot friends reilly, kirsten and joss. that make me cry now of joyness. :kiss: :cry:

 

i didn't know you read my poems here kirsten. ;)

Man I seriously don't wanna sound like an asshole(since I do it too), but there are some grammar mistakes.

You know it kinds of make the poem less enjoyable. :(

meh forget it

i never said the grammar on them are perfect.. in fact i said that if someone find mistakes on it they can let me know. :)

Oliver, although Ari's english is really good its kinda hard to expect a naturally spanish speaking person to write perfect english poems gramatically, but I dont think it matters.

 

As long as the feeling of the poem translates, its great.

I know.

I knew it that it would make me look like a backside, anyway Beatrize I've read some parts(cuz it's kinda long) and it's pretty cool, sounds like you've been really inspired.

Ahhh its no big deal man.

thanks a lot oli. i didn't think you are doing that with a bad intention... i understand that there are some mistakes firstly 'cause the reason that reilly said and also that i use to write them too fast sometimes, so then when i re-read them i find some mistakes and i correct them.

;)

Ari where did you speed off to so quick? :P

thanks a lot oli. i didn't think you are doing that with a bad intention... i understand that there are some mistakes firstly 'cause the reason that reilly said and also that i use to write them too fast sometimes, so then when i re-read them i find some mistakes and i correct them.

;)

Hey it's all cool, you english is way better than my spanish. :cool: ;)

Ari where did you speed off to so quick? :P

Sorry but my dad wanted to use the pc.. and i just received an sms... this morning got another of a friend.. seems a lot of friend need me now... i can't believe it. :)

Cooool! :cool:

thanks a lot oli. i didn't think you are doing that with a bad intention... i understand that there are some mistakes firstly 'cause the reason that reilly said and also that i use to write them too fast sometimes, so then when i re-read them i find some mistakes and i correct them.

;)

Hey it's all cool, you english is way better than my spanish. :cool: ;)

 

Thanks a lot Oli. ;) But i'm sure your spanish will be better if you keep improving it. ;)

I want to

I want to be rich

to make you happy

all the days of your life

 

I want to share with you

all the days of my life

to make you smile so sweet

 

I want to let you decide

which way to choose

stay alone or follow me

 

I want to give you back

all the days you care for me

to make you smile just for a second

 

I want to show you

how bad i feel

whenever i see you down

 

I want you stay with me

I want to dry your sad tears

and let you be free to go on

 

I don't mind with way you choose

I'll be close to you if you need help

Don't you mind if you have to ask me

If you need to go back, just come and sit

 

Sit down next to me

and let me show you

how to go on again

 

You teached me so many things

that i can't wrote all them

just on this lines.

 

Thats why i need to let you know

thanks a lot be with me all this time

thanks to be really the best friend

 

You teached me to show my feelings

to don't mind to cry if i need to

to tell somebody the truth

even if it hurts my heart

 

even if were the worst words

you heard from me

you still be there, day and night

 

When i needed to cry

you dried my tears

you offer me your shouder

to cry on and hug me.

 

You teach me to forgive

You guide me the best

to decide my way

 

I'm sorry for all the days

I made you cry or was rude

Forgive me again, friend.

 

Ariadna Squire Damique

(30 April 2005, Saturday)

Have you ever consider doing peoms with rhyme? :)

Yay another ari poem! so soon after the last too, its like christmas!

 

And for once I read it immediately, great poem ari :smug:

i use to write poems with rhyme in spanish....

anyways poetry had a lot of styles so... and now i'm reading a writer who don't have rhymes on the poems.. and end the sentences in the middle of a line.. and also is poetry, different as the usual.. but the thing of poetry and arts in general is make you feel something... :idea2: ...

I just read some poems by Antonio Gala and have both kind of poems with rhymes and withouth rhymes.. :idea2: and both are wonderful. anyways is easier to read with rhymes i must recognize this but poetry comes how comes.. :)

like christmas? :thinking:

 

thanks a lot Reilly.. i must recognize the Gala and Lorca inspired me hehe :D

I remember reading this poem from my spanish book about the girl(I can't remember tha name) and a eggplant it was quite cool.

Might even even look up for the author, if I won't be lazy in the morning.