fifi Posted April 24, 2005 Share Posted April 24, 2005 Yay a new poem! Did you stop writing for a while? :) I like it! :cool: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 24, 2005 Share Posted April 24, 2005 i stopped. :/ but i'm back :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reilly Posted April 24, 2005 Share Posted April 24, 2005 Shes back baby! I'll read this later. :cool: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 24, 2005 Share Posted April 24, 2005 thanks a lot reilly. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reilly Posted April 26, 2005 Share Posted April 26, 2005 Beautiful! :cool: Nice poem Ari. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlissfullyMuse Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 Guilty mind I've been all this night crying Nothing can't help me now, to feel better I feel so down today, i still wonder why I still heard the walls going down quickly Just for a few hours i had the world on my hands I had the chance to change and i let all go down Nothing can make me smile again i noticied that since some months ago nothing was the same nothing is clear again, all is dark yet I don't know what did i do wrong what did i do, and all seems so dark i can recognize anything near me now my hands can touch only smoke all the figures i knew are going now nothing is the same since days before i don't know yet what did i do wrong how i can fix all again until the machine broke itself how i'll can escape from those monsters once and again i crowl againt them again the crazy see, i was the best surfer i was so high and happy sitting down a tree looking how the world was moving but since some days the wind has stop i wonder why it won't come back anymore i can't stop crying day and night nothing can help me now i lost the chances i had on my hands Just for a few hours i had the world on my hands I had the chance to change and i let all go down Feel free, go away i said while my eyes beging to cry i felt my heart beating but my hands are so cold now nothing will be the same while i'll be here seeing the leafs moving nothing will change yet till i stand up and feel my heart. Ariadna Squire Damique (24-04-05 Sunday No joke i started crying when i read that because it relates to me so much right now, beautiful Ari! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joss Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 Same here.My life has become a mess lately..i like the poem :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 thanks a lot friends reilly, kirsten and joss. that make me cry now of joyness. :kiss: :cry: i didn't know you read my poems here kirsten. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bijeli_Miš Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 Man I seriously don't wanna sound like an asshole(since I do it too), but there are some grammar mistakes. You know it kinds of make the poem less enjoyable. :( meh forget it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 i never said the grammar on them are perfect.. in fact i said that if someone find mistakes on it they can let me know. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reilly Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 Oliver, although Ari's english is really good its kinda hard to expect a naturally spanish speaking person to write perfect english poems gramatically, but I dont think it matters. As long as the feeling of the poem translates, its great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bijeli_Miš Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 I know. I knew it that it would make me look like a backside, anyway Beatrize I've read some parts(cuz it's kinda long) and it's pretty cool, sounds like you've been really inspired. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reilly Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 Ahhh its no big deal man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 thanks a lot oli. i didn't think you are doing that with a bad intention... i understand that there are some mistakes firstly 'cause the reason that reilly said and also that i use to write them too fast sometimes, so then when i re-read them i find some mistakes and i correct them. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reilly Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 Ari where did you speed off to so quick? :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bijeli_Miš Posted April 27, 2005 Share Posted April 27, 2005 thanks a lot oli. i didn't think you are doing that with a bad intention... i understand that there are some mistakes firstly 'cause the reason that reilly said and also that i use to write them too fast sometimes, so then when i re-read them i find some mistakes and i correct them. ;) Hey it's all cool, you english is way better than my spanish. :cool: ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 28, 2005 Share Posted April 28, 2005 Ari where did you speed off to so quick? :P Sorry but my dad wanted to use the pc.. and i just received an sms... this morning got another of a friend.. seems a lot of friend need me now... i can't believe it. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reilly Posted April 28, 2005 Share Posted April 28, 2005 Cooool! :cool: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 28, 2005 Share Posted April 28, 2005 thanks a lot oli. i didn't think you are doing that with a bad intention... i understand that there are some mistakes firstly 'cause the reason that reilly said and also that i use to write them too fast sometimes, so then when i re-read them i find some mistakes and i correct them. ;) Hey it's all cool, you english is way better than my spanish. :cool: ;) Thanks a lot Oli. ;) But i'm sure your spanish will be better if you keep improving it. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 30, 2005 Share Posted April 30, 2005 I want to I want to be rich to make you happy all the days of your life I want to share with you all the days of my life to make you smile so sweet I want to let you decide which way to choose stay alone or follow me I want to give you back all the days you care for me to make you smile just for a second I want to show you how bad i feel whenever i see you down I want you stay with me I want to dry your sad tears and let you be free to go on I don't mind with way you choose I'll be close to you if you need help Don't you mind if you have to ask me If you need to go back, just come and sit Sit down next to me and let me show you how to go on again You teached me so many things that i can't wrote all them just on this lines. Thats why i need to let you know thanks a lot be with me all this time thanks to be really the best friend You teached me to show my feelings to don't mind to cry if i need to to tell somebody the truth even if it hurts my heart even if were the worst words you heard from me you still be there, day and night When i needed to cry you dried my tears you offer me your shouder to cry on and hug me. You teach me to forgive You guide me the best to decide my way I'm sorry for all the days I made you cry or was rude Forgive me again, friend. Ariadna Squire Damique (30 April 2005, Saturday) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bijeli_Miš Posted April 30, 2005 Share Posted April 30, 2005 Have you ever consider doing peoms with rhyme? :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reilly Posted April 30, 2005 Share Posted April 30, 2005 Yay another ari poem! so soon after the last too, its like christmas! And for once I read it immediately, great poem ari :smug: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 30, 2005 Share Posted April 30, 2005 i use to write poems with rhyme in spanish.... anyways poetry had a lot of styles so... and now i'm reading a writer who don't have rhymes on the poems.. and end the sentences in the middle of a line.. and also is poetry, different as the usual.. but the thing of poetry and arts in general is make you feel something... :idea2: ... I just read some poems by Antonio Gala and have both kind of poems with rhymes and withouth rhymes.. :idea2: and both are wonderful. anyways is easier to read with rhymes i must recognize this but poetry comes how comes.. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 30, 2005 Share Posted April 30, 2005 like christmas? :thinking: thanks a lot Reilly.. i must recognize the Gala and Lorca inspired me hehe :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bijeli_Miš Posted April 30, 2005 Share Posted April 30, 2005 I remember reading this poem from my spanish book about the girl(I can't remember tha name) and a eggplant it was quite cool. Might even even look up for the author, if I won't be lazy in the morning. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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