Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted November 1, 2007 Share Posted November 1, 2007 light my way you left me too soon we all weren't ready for i think now that you knew it you prepared yourself for but i can't help it every time i remember my heart brokes in pieces i blame myself for everything i just wanted you to stay you were the reason of my life you were the guide i needed your departur thought me more than books the show must go on, all said to me that's what i try everyday i still can see your smile your dark eyes, not joy not sad them bright when saw me happy you are my angel now you are the messenger i waited for you thought me the harder lesson be brave, breath and go on i want to thank your effort that's why i'm still here everyday i think of you there's nothing more i can do i pray for your every night asking God to care you i still remember you, as yesterday what happened pains my soul there's nothing now, but keep hope i'm sure you are in heaven dear i'll fight each day for you with the same strong that you had i'll pray to God as you did honest and pure, like an angel when all was dark you always lighted my way i did my best always not to make you sad i'll do my best now to make you proud be yourself, don't mind the rest be pure, honest, pure soul, you said going on without you is not easy but i'll do it for you now i'll walk for you, breath for you you are the light of my way All I'll do it'll be for you nothing will be enough to thank you all I can do is pray each day all I will get will be for you there's my only arm left since you've gone (29/10/2007) Ariadna Squire Damique i still think it needs some changes, but anyways here it goes. I wanna post it today :) (Donde quiera que estés, es para ti :kiss:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted December 1, 2007 Share Posted December 1, 2007 give me a reason why to wake up this morning? all is dark and blue for me i forgot all i've learnt i can't breath anymore my face is sad my sight is lost but it don't even shows how deeply bad i feel. i want to find it again a reason to keep my faith a reason that makes me smile something to feel i'm alive i feel lost in that maze the more i run to escape the more it grows around i made a sea with all the tears that had drop off my eyes help me not to sink in that sea why to wake up this morning my sight is lost give me a reason to smile 'cause all i want has gone i don't remember yet when was the last time that i felt fine when all that sadness begun i don't know how to find a reason to feel good do you have a cure for that illness that i have? i had hold on too many things i carried the world on my back like Atlas did as punishement my back hurts for all that who poisoned me with that this blue feeling thad digs on me deep, deep, like the cut of a knife there's glass around, a room of glass sometimes i feel canned like if i were a pet and all the rest looks from above help to escape from this maze i wonder every morning how did i got here? did i built it? I want to be free how could i had slaved myself? how to escape there's a glass around me down a sea of my tears i'm in a tiny room of a maze there's any chance to escape yet? there's any cure for that illness? I want to leave that weight that had trapped me in more and more help me not to sink in that sea to cure the poison that digs me you see my worst side now some years ago all shine around nothing was that sadly blue i want to keep the hope i want to feel it all again, love just your eyes were so light blue and looked straight at mines, staring it made me smile and breath i want to feel it again, be free you are the last memory of my past i want you back, i wish every second i can't do anything now, past hurts free of the chain that slaved me i can breath again, feel renewed leaving the room of glass that i had built watching the sea that i made. i still feel pain, but you tenderly whisper clearly to my ear, offering me your help so i wake up and ask, a bit afraid could you help me to walk again? i'm afraid of that is to come i feel i'm not ready for all that many changes in few time would you be patience and guide me? Ariadna Squire Damique (01 december 2007) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FlyingV Posted December 5, 2007 Share Posted December 5, 2007 HI-5 verry naighce...do u base yur poetry on what u see and feel or do u draw from scenerios that every day ppl can relate to?...lol you should publish some of these and see how much u make out of them ^^... i gotta read through the rest of these they are superb... yellowtalk and i are working on a song perhaps u could help us ^^... i like to rite poems from experience but, unfortunately, i lead a pretty boring life ^^.... lol all in all keep up the good work ^^... ps:who is that in your avy? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted December 5, 2007 Share Posted December 5, 2007 :blush: thanks i write them half and half, i remember feelings and events that had happened in my life, other's is just write about how i feel when i'm writing it... yesterday i wanted to write a really sad one, (long story) but i don't find the right words yet :( well i found difficult to write poems in english as is not my mother tongue for the rythm and things like that.. what help me to get it is listening to songs, so when i write them i re-read them to see if keeps sense and have a good rythm. :) so sometimes the handwritten original version is a bit different of what i end posting here. i think my life is boring sometimes :uhoh: btw my avi is Placebo's singer. :) about my poetry i think that is like Brian once said: "The more personal you make something, the more universal it becomes, because essentially we're all made up of the same emotional stuff." ;) i see a progression in my poems, from the first to the recent ones. :) the topics are different, sometimes i want to write about topics and with the style of the first ones. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted December 5, 2007 Share Posted December 5, 2007 Mrs Nobody Where's the silent girl now Where is her shadow today? nobody wonder about it nobody miss Mrs Nobody the dark girl came silent just sat and don't talks pretending to be different when is as all us lost in the flown of this unknown river that one called life where we all sail wanted to live fast pretending humility but driving a fast car with which she crashed nobody cried for Mrs Nobody nobody worried about her leaving she left so sudden as fast as she lived nobody talks about that girl now crash on a car is not so popular people still remember that guy talkative, that crashed with a bike all your future has gone away it won't be back, be sure of that is just dust in the wind now just like the silent words that you said lived as fast as a thunder make up all herself, in dark to hide her real face trying to be different she felt fine that way but she surely knews she was a sheep, like us looking for a path to follow the wolf found her, hid on a corner and bite her on the road a tiring summer, new fast car all was fine till it crashed on a wall where's the silent girl now the dark girl came silent she wanted to live fast nobody cried for Mrs Nobody Ariadna Squire Damique (05/12/2007) the one i just told you about on my previous post here Terry. :) finally i got the right words, although is sad, is a true story :cry: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
grids Posted December 7, 2007 Share Posted December 7, 2007 Mrs Nobody Where's the silent girl now Where is her shadow today? nobody wonder about it nobody miss Mrs Nobody the dark girl came silent just sat and don't talks pretending to be different when is as all us lost in the flown of this unknown river that one called life where we all sail wanted to live fast pretending humility but driving a fast car with which she crashed nobody cried for Mrs Nobody nobody worried about her leaving she left so sudden as fast as she lived nobody talks about that girl now crash on a car is not so popular people still remember that guy talkative, that crashed with a bike all your future has gone away it won't be back, be sure of that is just dust in the wind now just like the silent words that you said lived as fast as a thunder make up all herself, in dark to hide her real face trying to be different she felt fine that way but she surely knews she was a sheep, like us looking for a path to follow the wolf found her, hid on a corner and bite her on the road a tiring summer, new fast car all was fine till it crashed on a wall where's the silent girl now the dark girl came silent she wanted to live fast nobody cried for Mrs Nobody Ariadna Squire Damique (05/12/2007) hey ari, how are you? btw.. i think you got a little bit mistake here (i think) its only my opinion, dont worry.. im not good in english:D the dark girl came silent just sat and don't talks pretending to be different when is as all us don't talks should be talk... because is negative when is as all us.. hmm :thinking: i dont think those words gonna be like that ari, "us" means "we" and should put "are" there.. but i dont know how to arrange words so well:D from me, when all are us..... but im not sure:( at least, the words are so touching ari.... those are meaningful:cry: great job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FlyingV Posted December 7, 2007 Share Posted December 7, 2007 "The more personal you make something, the more universal it becomes, because essentially we're all made up of the same emotional stuff." ... i tried using that philosophy once but it dosnt work on a intimate scale... and i no longer believe it ^^ i mean sure we all laugh we all cry we all get angry... but we all release our emotions differently and we all interpret things differently... i have come to the conclusion that the only thing we have in common..... is death... as depressing as it seems... but i think it is poetic... we are all united in our final destination.... btw nice poem ^^ i liked it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted December 7, 2007 Share Posted December 7, 2007 thanks afi :blush: i needed to write it, since something bad happened in the uni here recently, and it made think about it... i mean my poem is based on a true thing that happened in my uni, there was a girl that hardly speak with people, and the beginning of second year she didn't came and someone said that she died that summer :cry: i felt sorry for that, and seemed it was only me who was sad for that news :cry: poor girl. yes you are right about the first mistake afi, but about the second one... is right... is the only way it makes sense if you look the line above it.... she pretend to be different when she is like all us. @ Terry: thanks :nice: you are totally right... that's the good thing of arts, when you create something you are feeling it, and have the need to write/compose/paint it, and share it to other people, and they can interpret it in a totally different way. that's the great thing of it. :) when i begun to write peotry is because i needed to write them, i had many ideas and feeling and the only way to order/calm them was to write them, it made me feel better, i never though that i would be sharing it with people. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
grids Posted December 15, 2007 Share Posted December 15, 2007 thanks afi :blush: i needed to write it, since something bad happened in the uni here recently, and it made think about it... i mean my poem is based on a true thing that happened in my uni, there was a girl that hardly speak with people, and the beginning of second year she didn't came and someone said that she died that summer :cry: i felt sorry for that, and seemed it was only me who was sad for that news :cry: poor girl. yes you are right about the first mistake afi, but about the second one... is right... is the only way it makes sense if you look the line above it.... she pretend to be different when she is like all us. ooh, im sorry to hear that:( yeah way to go keep working to write ari;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted January 7, 2008 Share Posted January 7, 2008 hey i sent some of my old spanish poems to a local mag that is online :nice: and they added me, and will publish some poems there like next March or so :D btw there's a local tale competition, that is organized by an old teacher that i had at high school :surprised: i'm thinking to take part in it, but i haven't wrote a tale (child's one) since long time ago... :thinking: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted February 22, 2008 Share Posted February 22, 2008 read some poems on poets section made me write again, although i though that are pretty simple... there them go: 3 new poems. walk with me i was walking down the street no destination decided no direction, no place i was lost on my way i tried my best but it wasn't enough i lose my years and can't go back past is the past future will come but now, dear friend what do i do? i'm lost in the way and can't go back what do i do now? how to change the things? how to make all be better? i can't hide, can't walk i can't fight forever help me friend, don't leave me now i'm begging you cheer me up, pal i can't keep been as i've been i can't do a better thing i'm a poor soul, that needs to heal help me to go on, to make sense because i'm lost in the way i don't know who i am i'm too far of my plans i'm not half of what i want hold my hand, and come with me we'll see together what will come don't let me get lose be my compass, love 20/02/2008 --------- i did it sat in the chair, feeling sad looking trhough the window all happy faces looking at me going out don't helps i meet you again and again i'm happy for her, trully but i wanted him to be mine i was a friend of you and you stole my friend i can't be in between you've been matched i'm again the one that lose i never win, that happy game i introduced you both and your eyes shine of joy my heart is broke in pieces i can't mend it, is like sand i can't go back, go ahead wiping my tears, for you i didn't saw the signs but it was pretty clear you weren't for me but it still pains i can't change anything i can't do a thing i wish you the best but my joy has gone i feel myself empty i feel deeply alone sitting on the chair looking at you 20/02/08 --------- take me back that sound make me remember that light make me feel again that sun lets me think when all was dark you always cheered me up when i cried you wiped my tears and now that music make me remember you you still was here i can't believe two years had gone by i still remember those last days we spent blaming me, don't helps you won't be back again i won't see you eyes or hear your voice cry you an ocean won't make you come feeling guilty won't make things change there's nothing to be sorry i always made my best i went on for you till you had to go there were things you didn't understand things we won't know, but we shared half a life your are still my light the reason why i'm here those sounds and sun takes me back to you 22/02/07 Ariadna Squire Damique Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted February 26, 2008 Share Posted February 26, 2008 Like a leaf wind blows strong it can't stand more it brokes and falls as i'm feeling now surfing in the wind no destination chosed feeling blue and sad till i crash in the sand it got old and broke it broke and fall it falls to the sand useless and sad it was green, and new it felt all so good it got dark and brown it falled down part of it made paper to let people write in part of it made wood to give people forniture it felt as the bad part of all of the good thing as bad as that little girl that stands in the party people pass over it people don't mind of it the little old leaf what matters is the whole thing what's important is the tree but the leaf wanted to be free so it left quick what if you feel sad and blue what if you have nobody to talk to what if you have no tree and wants things to change you needs to be couraged enough to leave and go alone you needs to feel confident to choose the better now what matters is you you are alone, old and free things have just start wait for things to come go and fly by yourself don't worry to fall down it won't happen again you have learned enough go and be free be what you want to don't worry anymore it was just a leaf don't fear to walk alone ready to go, start do things by your own surf in the wind like the leaf on the sand of the tree you've planted don't feel more blue and sad just wait for things to come Ariadna Squire Damique (26/02/08 Tuesday) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nicko84 Posted February 27, 2008 Share Posted February 27, 2008 Like a leaf wind blows strong it can't stand more it brokes and falls as i'm feeling now surfing in the wind no destination chosed feeling blue and sad till i crash in the sand it got old and broke it broke and fall it falls to the sand useless and sad it was green, and new it felt all so good it got dark and brown it falled down part of it made paper to let people write in part of it made wood to give people forniture it felt as the bad part of all of the good thing as bad as that little girl that stands in the party people pass over it people don't mind of it the little old leaf what matters is the whole thing what's important is the tree but the leaf wanted to be free so it left quick what if you feel sad and blue what if you have nobody to talk to what if you have no tree and wants things to change you needs to be couraged enough to leave and go alone you needs to feel confident to choose the better now what matters is you you are alone, old and free things have just start wait for things to come go and fly by yourself don't worry to fall down it won't happen again you have learned enough go and be free be what you want to don't worry anymore it was just a leaf don't fear to walk alone ready to go, start do things by your own surf in the wind like the leaf on the sand of the tree you've planted don't feel more blue and sad just wait for things to come Ariadna Squire Damique (26/02/08 Tuesday) a poem..i din't know you could write such beautiful ones too:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivers of Avalon Posted February 27, 2008 Share Posted February 27, 2008 its not astonishing from bea... i think that this young poetess really has a potential and oportunity to become wellknown ......:D is it the truth? :):):) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nicko84 Posted February 27, 2008 Share Posted February 27, 2008 OH:PFUCKA YES:D:D COME ON BEA!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivers of Avalon Posted February 27, 2008 Share Posted February 27, 2008 f*** yourself dupe :shy: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
grids Posted February 28, 2008 Share Posted February 28, 2008 Like a leaf wind blows strong it can't stand more it brokes and falls as i'm feeling now surfing in the wind no destination chosed feeling blue and sad till i crash in the sand it got old and broke it broke and fall it falls to the sand useless and sad it was green, and new it felt all so good it got dark and brown it falled down part of it made paper to let people write in part of it made wood to give people forniture it felt as the bad part of all of the good thing as bad as that little girl that stands in the party people pass over it people don't mind of it the little old leaf what matters is the whole thing what's important is the tree but the leaf wanted to be free so it left quick what if you feel sad and blue what if you have nobody to talk to what if you have no tree and wants things to change you needs to be couraged enough to leave and go alone you needs to feel confident to choose the better now what matters is you you are alone, old and free things have just start wait for things to come go and fly by yourself don't worry to fall down it won't happen again you have learned enough go and be free be what you want to don't worry anymore it was just a leaf don't fear to walk alone ready to go, start do things by your own surf in the wind like the leaf on the sand of the tree you've planted don't feel more blue and sad just wait for things to come Ariadna Squire Damique (26/02/08 Tuesday) nice :nice: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 1, 2008 Share Posted April 1, 2008 In Pressed In Pressed busy working day, tiring routine machines working around, fast and low we are in a rush, going up and down the bus we are pressed, we are pressed, we are pressed don't mind of who is next to us don't leave a seat for the babe don't talk to our friends until the end of the day because we are in a hurry we are always hungry we all become angry and why, and why and why because we are in a rush getting late to everywhere we kept awake too late we are pressed, we get depressed under pressure, we are are all day nothing we mind, nothing we care after all we aren't impressed we just walk, to nowhere we don't mind what's on the press after all we aren't impressed even when we see oursleves face printed on the paper press yes after all we are in press don't mind the pressure be proud and presume we are printed in press read down, read below critizised, portrayed we are in a hurry, pressed going nowhere, depressed. Busy working day we are in a hurry getting on, getting out always getting late nothing we mind, nothing we care we don't mind what's on the press we just presume of been there our face is on the cover impressed Ariadna Squire Damique (31/03/2008) ------ Note: Suppousely is meant to be a song, witten by a fictional musician, that is the main character of the story i'm working on now. Fictional Character name: Sage Shire (born Lester Albert Sigmund von Hultz O'Shire) Member of the fictional band: Rail-River Song included on the fictional first band EP: Manic Hill (fictionally realised in May, 1997) (Track number 3 of the 7 that the album includes) Suppousely the character wrote the song when was 12 years old, is it believeable for you? The album title is meant to be a tribute to the bands Cypress Hill and Manic Street Preachers. The band name is meant to be a tribute to River Phoenix. What do you think about? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 1, 2008 Share Posted April 1, 2008 Caress that i don't care Nevermore i'll see you again and I really don't mind all we had done yesterday is just a memory on my mind nothing I care about we just did what we wanted to why to care for anything else? Why to call you today? Cause we shared, ourselves I had rented you, you had owned me cause those are caress that I don't care we behaved as more than friends those secrets that you told me I will never tell to anybody those kisses that I gave you will never repeat again cause I am as you could saw a mean man, just called you for fun didn't you already knew that? I know also about your reputation, my dear I had rested next to you you were the one I thought I would never had on my arms and i've succeded, are you surprised? Cause we shared ourselves you had owned me, I had rented you cause those were caress that I don't care i'm a knight at all, I will never tell about it you know, those kisses that we gave you know, how happy it made me feel I know, how joy were you too I saw, the shine on your spotlight but after all, I don't mind I won't call you this night yesterday is from past things I fear to look back i'm not ashamed of anything i'm proud of yesterday does it bothers you? Do you mind a thing at all? Ariadna Squire Damique (01/04/2008) ------ Note: Is also meant to be a song of another character. Fictional Character name: Ramón Jameson (born Timothy Brandon Raymond Hutlz Jameson) Member of the fictional band: Panacea Sonora Song included on the fictional band second album: Sweet Lips, Bitter Mind (fictionally realised in March, 1994) (Is meant to be their third single of that album) What do you think about this other one? O.M.G. I've realised that there's a mistake... they have almost the same surname :uhoh: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivers of Avalon Posted April 1, 2008 Share Posted April 1, 2008 u already know my opinion about ur art, its nice but to be honest i prefer "like a leaf"...i like its rhythm...and i'll give a tip, the poem is loaded with same words and this is a bit boring.......(i dont criticize):):P im talking about "in pressed" the last one is really perfect......what do u mean in the same surname? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nicko84 Posted April 1, 2008 Share Posted April 1, 2008 ;) goooood! I liked the topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 1, 2008 Share Posted April 1, 2008 well zaza, has you read both poems spoilers?... the first one is meant to had been written by a 12 years old boy... :uhoh: I think is good taking it to account. (i has written two more 'songs' of this fictional character yesterday). :) and about the surname thing: the first character surname is von Hultz and the second one Hultz... lol i hadn't had realised about it before... i must change of them surnames then :thinking: i could say that the second one is slightly based on Placebo music generally (particulary on PFWIW), in fact the fictional band name is almost a sinonym of them (at least in spanish). Btw both titles are some titles i had on mind for future poems, and finally ta dah is done. thanks nicko... which one did you liked most? ;) btw what do you think about the band names and characters... i'm really interested on your opinion people. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nicko84 Posted April 1, 2008 Share Posted April 1, 2008 i prefer this second one....i told it you....the topic fascinated me more in this poem Band names?......in which sense?.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darlene_Ihnfsa Posted April 1, 2008 Share Posted April 1, 2008 lol none of you had read the spoiler?... first one is meant to be written by a fictional musician called Siggy Shire from a fictional band called Rail-River. the second character is meant to be called Ramón Jameson, from a fictional band called Panacea Sonora. Another band names i'm working on the story are: The Waterfalls (leader Jack Sanders); Chrysalis (leader Urban Lester). lol i'm telling you almost everything about the story... ok, there's any more things you want to know about the story? thanks Nicko. I guess that most the songs of this band will be like that :uhoh: (i mean the second one: CTIDC). Oh my, i just realises this second poem is based on a Placebo soing with same number of letters in abreviation :o [Panacea Sonora song =(CTIDC)=(PFWIW) = Placebo song] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivers of Avalon Posted April 1, 2008 Share Posted April 1, 2008 maybe everything is that u like the surname "Hultz" very very much:D(its not mistake(i think)).... about the band names and characters, ithink that they're quite typical for them:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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